Touching the void
5/7/5 poem5 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
I like the profound and uplifting sentiment expressed in your poem but feel the punctuation could be improved to reinforce the meaning. You begin with a statement then end with a question, so you should have a full stop and a capital letter for the question part; also the verb needs modification:
Imagination
is the oxygen of hope.
Who needs wings to fly?
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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I like the profound and uplifting sentiment expressed in your poem but feel the punctuation could be improved to reinforce the meaning. You begin with a statement then end with a question, so you should have a full stop and a capital letter for the question part; also the verb needs modification:
Imagination
is the oxygen of hope.
Who needs wings to fly?
Comment Written 21-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2020
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Hello Lisa, I thank you for your time, so pleased that you like this write; grateful for your kind suggestion/correction; I appreciate it very much, thank you.
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I am very pleased to see how well your poems are doing in contests. Congratulations. You have a gift for getting strong ideas down in few words.
Thank you for the honor of your review nomination.
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I am deeply humbled my friend, thank you.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This theme reminds me of the movie called Never Ending Story. It addresses the same theme as your poem. It talks about how all hope will be gone if imagination dies. Well thought out.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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This theme reminds me of the movie called Never Ending Story. It addresses the same theme as your poem. It talks about how all hope will be gone if imagination dies. Well thought out.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Hi Liz, so glad you like the write; I appreciate your visit and the wonderful review, thank you.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Hope is the one thing that we cannot afford to lose in all of this chaos... a wonderful offering for this contest - thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! :) ;)
who need wings --> who needs wings
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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Hope is the one thing that we cannot afford to lose in all of this chaos... a wonderful offering for this contest - thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! :) ;)
who need wings --> who needs wings
Comment Written 20-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2020
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My friend, I thank you for your time and the insights; also, the correction, very kind of you; hopefully, you're all settled now; please take care.
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
This is beautiful. I love the positivity.
Perfect syllable count, original take on the theme of hope and well presented.
Wishing you goo luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Hello :)
This is beautiful. I love the positivity.
Perfect syllable count, original take on the theme of hope and well presented.
Wishing you goo luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 19-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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Hello Debra and thank you very much for your wonderful review.
Comment from equestrik
I like the picture and feel it goes well with your words. Should the final line read who needs rather than who need? Overall, though, this is a nice piece.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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I like the picture and feel it goes well with your words. Should the final line read who needs rather than who need? Overall, though, this is a nice piece.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
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My friend, I thank you.