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With their call stalled, Liz & Linda begin walking

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Comment from AJ McCall
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Reading this touches every emotion in me... And I love the name Sage. I actually have a character with the same name. The story is heart-felt, strong, and true... Very well done Liz. (The artwork reminds me of Van Gough's.)

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your supportive enthusiastic review. I'm glad you are appreciating the story.
reply by AJ McCall on 23-Aug-2020
    You're very welcome.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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(typos: her's s/b hers; handcuff s/b handcuffs; else-where s/b elsewhere; PTSD=Post-TraumaTIC STRESS Disorder; the was high s/b SHE was high; get of rid s/b get rid of)

Gripping story, well told; characters and dialog are believable. Cheers. LIZ

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 19-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your supportive review. I'm glad you appreciated it.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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This chapter made think a lot, sometimes when we clash cultures things are for the worst. I heard about the branding of the "merchandise", all this is so scary. "
Directing her attention to Liz and Linda, "This involves a medicine person smudging us, immersing us in smoke from burning sage.There will also be an extensive time spent in a sweat lodge to purify our mind, body, soul and to relieve our trauma."
"Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your supportive involved review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Wow.... there's a lot here that presents the plight of people on the reservations, Liz, and really brings home that 'plight' to the reader through the girls you've 'built' with your story -- well done! ;) Thanx for sharing (and I need to go back and catch up, now!)... ;) Yvette

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 18-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your interested review. Please do go back and fill in. There is no need for a review. Just take your time and appreciate.
Comment from equestrik
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This is a well written chapter and is very timely as the human trafficking issues are really coming to the forefront on the news as well as social media. A good write on a tough topic.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
    Thank you for you involved review. I'm glad you appreciated it.
Comment from aryr
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You did very well with this continuation chapter, Liz. I liked how you encouraged everyone to share something of themselves, even if it was a memory of a loved one who had been there, done that, etc. I was so pleased that Sage was able to share and declare her devotion to become a medicine person, a shaman to some tribes. Great job, very much enjoyed.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your appreciative and encouraging review. I'm glad you liked it.
reply by aryr on 17-Aug-2020
    You are very welcome Liz.
Comment from Mistydawn
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Poor things, it's going to take a long time for them to deal with all the torture, move on. I like how you added a little backstory this time. It made the characters seem more realistic. Your chapter is well-written, very interesting start to finish. I look forward to reading more.

 Comment Written 15-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your appreciative and encouraging review. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from lyenochka
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Great story from Strong Heart and she is able to help Liz and Linda have a spiritual perspective about this horrendous experience the girls have gone through by sharing about her sister. Hopefully, her sister will gain healing by sharing with Strong Heart after she comes out of the coma.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your lovely review. I'm glad you appreciated it.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
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A few interesting things are revealed to me in this chapter. I didn't know that heroin was used frequently among the natives in the reservations. That does not sound very promising for the sanity of the tribes!
The enormous importance of someone who is called a "medicine person".
The sacrifices they have to go through though, during their learning time...ten days of fasting, for example, doesn't sound very pleasant at all...

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
    Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you learned from it.
reply by Marjon van Bruggen on 15-Aug-2020
    Welcome, Liz.