Poems By AnnieDawn
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 " Forgotten "My book of poems and stories
15 total reviews
Comment from estory
This is such a great image, of the forgotten graves, in the unmown grass. Crumbling and decaying as we drive passed. 'Stand sentry above buried bone.' we get that sense of honor and discipline from a life of sacrifice. estory
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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This is such a great image, of the forgotten graves, in the unmown grass. Crumbling and decaying as we drive passed. 'Stand sentry above buried bone.' we get that sense of honor and discipline from a life of sacrifice. estory
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for reviewing my entry and the kind words. I appreciate your time. Stay safe and well in this time of strife this country of ours is having right now.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I like this rhyming poem to remember the forgotten soldiers that have sacrificing their life for generations of happiness. Yes, the gravestone has decayed but their spirits will forever be member in our hearts.
Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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I like this rhyming poem to remember the forgotten soldiers that have sacrificing their life for generations of happiness. Yes, the gravestone has decayed but their spirits will forever be member in our hearts.
Well done.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your review. I appreciate your time and kind words. Stay well and safe in these trying times.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine dedication to those brave soldiers who found themselves dying at a young age, not in a blaze of glory, but in a cold and horrifying death through war which was created by others, a poignant write here Annie, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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A fine dedication to those brave soldiers who found themselves dying at a young age, not in a blaze of glory, but in a cold and horrifying death through war which was created by others, a poignant write here Annie, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review. I appreciate comments like you have given. Stay well and safe in these trying times.
Comment from Markie Doczi
I thought this well-written. I liked the second sentence: "stand sentry above buried bone."
The topic was a good one; it's sad to see things like this.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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I thought this well-written. I liked the second sentence: "stand sentry above buried bone."
The topic was a good one; it's sad to see things like this.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review. I appreciate comments like you have given. Stay well and safe in these trying times.
Comment from WalkerMan
Yes, it is indeed sad that so many graves are no longer tended. Yet, the total number of graves keeps growing; and, once all who remember a specific grave are also gone, it is not surprising that it becomes abandoned. It would take a veritable army of grave-tenders to handle the myriad multi-plot areas, let alone all the smaller plots. While there is no general solution for this issue, your thoughtful post may prompt some local action in a few places.
Meanwhile, I notice that your rhyme scheme for the first two stanzas is a-a-b-b, but is a-b-b-a in stanza 3. Accordingly, you might consider the following adjustment to make that consistent as a-a-b-b.
We honor all soldiers "so brave";
But many an ancestor's grave,
Without a flag or floral spray,
Now crumbles with mold and decay.
Does this help you? -- Mike
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Yes, it is indeed sad that so many graves are no longer tended. Yet, the total number of graves keeps growing; and, once all who remember a specific grave are also gone, it is not surprising that it becomes abandoned. It would take a veritable army of grave-tenders to handle the myriad multi-plot areas, let alone all the smaller plots. While there is no general solution for this issue, your thoughtful post may prompt some local action in a few places.
Meanwhile, I notice that your rhyme scheme for the first two stanzas is a-a-b-b, but is a-b-b-a in stanza 3. Accordingly, you might consider the following adjustment to make that consistent as a-a-b-b.
We honor all soldiers "so brave";
But many an ancestor's grave,
Without a flag or floral spray,
Now crumbles with mold and decay.
Does this help you? -- Mike
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Very good pickup for me. I do thank you for your kind review and helpful suggestion. It is a great way to assist a damsel in distress. Thank you so much. I am grateful for your help. Stay well during this trying time we are having. God bless.
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You are welcome. I am glad to have helped.
Thank you for the well wishes. You too. -- Mike
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your rhyming poetry contest entry reads well. There is good flow and great imagery. The art choice is a perfect pairing with your poignant words.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Your rhyming poetry contest entry reads well. There is good flow and great imagery. The art choice is a perfect pairing with your poignant words.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review. I appreciate comments like you have given. Stay well and safe in these trying times.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This piece is excellent in every respect. The message conveyed is powerful.
I have seen such cemeteries--such a sad sight. The style/format is appealing, and your lines flow smoothly.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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This piece is excellent in every respect. The message conveyed is powerful.
I have seen such cemeteries--such a sad sight. The style/format is appealing, and your lines flow smoothly.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review. I appreciate comments like you have given. Stay well and safe in these trying times.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
A very good point you bring up in this memorial type poem. There are so many forgotten graves in our countries, that are no longer tended to. I wonder if anyone in Government is a Minister of the Dead? Definitely not.
But perhaps there should be some department that is cognizant of these ancient plots. Well done.
Ralf
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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A very good point you bring up in this memorial type poem. There are so many forgotten graves in our countries, that are no longer tended to. I wonder if anyone in Government is a Minister of the Dead? Definitely not.
But perhaps there should be some department that is cognizant of these ancient plots. Well done.
Ralf
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review. I appreciate comments like you have given. Stay well and safe in these trying times.
Comment from joycetreasures
Hello AnnieDawn,
I pray you are doing well these days during this pandemic and chaos in the world. I like your poem, "Forgotten." It's sad that there are many graves with no flowers or the grass cut around it. As you said, families and friends are gone and there's no one to maintain the burial sites. So true, mold and decay have grown around many graves. It's sad. Great photo used to reflect your beautiful message. I really can relate to your message within my family, who most are gone. Nicely written. Well done. Happy future writing:-)
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Hello AnnieDawn,
I pray you are doing well these days during this pandemic and chaos in the world. I like your poem, "Forgotten." It's sad that there are many graves with no flowers or the grass cut around it. As you said, families and friends are gone and there's no one to maintain the burial sites. So true, mold and decay have grown around many graves. It's sad. Great photo used to reflect your beautiful message. I really can relate to your message within my family, who most are gone. Nicely written. Well done. Happy future writing:-)
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review. I appreciate comments like you have given. Stay well and safe in these trying times.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
I have noticed that too. As if the ancestors never mattered. It probably is the truth...now. In the old days, when they were buried in those now forgotten graves, they were mourned by their loved ones, just as we now do for our father, mother, child, dear friend or soldier. We mourn and clean their graves, bring flowers and send prayers for those we knew. The generations before that become history, but form no part of our lives anymore.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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I have noticed that too. As if the ancestors never mattered. It probably is the truth...now. In the old days, when they were buried in those now forgotten graves, they were mourned by their loved ones, just as we now do for our father, mother, child, dear friend or soldier. We mourn and clean their graves, bring flowers and send prayers for those we knew. The generations before that become history, but form no part of our lives anymore.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review. I appreciate comments like you have given. Stay well and safe in these trying times.
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