Touching a Woman
25 syllables (those delicate legs)8 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Poet I gave you your first vote!
For its beauty and grace I think comparing a woman with a butterfly works well.
I had to check out what ...butterfly kisses... are :
fluttering one's eyelashes against another person's skin
... heck , that must be titillating ( biggrin)
A movement that also imitates well butterfly wings that flutter! ..so great choice of wording
Your poem is a double delight :
firstly for its imagery effect
which then triggers a strong mental sensory feeling.
PS: the title in my opinion is too long ... and plain for such a lovely poem.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Ciao Poet I gave you your first vote!
For its beauty and grace I think comparing a woman with a butterfly works well.
I had to check out what ...butterfly kisses... are :
fluttering one's eyelashes against another person's skin
... heck , that must be titillating ( biggrin)
A movement that also imitates well butterfly wings that flutter! ..so great choice of wording
Your poem is a double delight :
firstly for its imagery effect
which then triggers a strong mental sensory feeling.
PS: the title in my opinion is too long ... and plain for such a lovely poem.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2020
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Tempeste,
You are the second reviewer to comment on my long title. I probably overdid it. I was trying to allude that my imagery could be either the butterfly flittering about the flower or the woman titillating her man. Methinks it is too late to change with the voting already starting (-;
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I got what you were alluding to but your whole poem already does that ..
When the contest is over you can still change it to something more captivating .
️Ciao !
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a fine tribute to the butterfly as it kisses the flowers and adds colour to our garden, these delicate insects are delightful, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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This is a fine tribute to the butterfly as it kisses the flowers and adds colour to our garden, these delicate insects are delightful, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Thanks Dolly for your acknowledgement of this post. Truthfully, the poem idea formed when I saw the butterfly flitting about in my yard. The contest rules morphed it to a longer more romantic verse (-;
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A wonderful offering for the contest that certainly leads the reader on - wink, wink! ;) :) I think I would change the title, though, and leave the interpretation solely in the reader's court... sort of like "Lady in Red" or something... ;) :) ;) Great job on the poem!! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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A wonderful offering for the contest that certainly leads the reader on - wink, wink! ;) :) I think I would change the title, though, and leave the interpretation solely in the reader's court... sort of like "Lady in Red" or something... ;) :) ;) Great job on the poem!! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Yvette,
Honestly this poem idea started out with my seeing a butterfly flitting about in my yard. So my typical 5-7-5 morphed into 25 syllables for this contest prompt. I might have labeled my title as Scent of a Woman, the Al Pacino movie, but maybe I will change it to your suggestion ; ) :)
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Don't sweat my suggestion -- yours works really well too -- just think its 'double meaning' is best left to the realization of the reader (with no 'up front' prompting)... :) :) Take care! ;)
Comment from Vanna1
Great poem. So realistic and playful. Full of lovely emotions. Great presentation. This is a great entry. Top contender for sure. I would wish you luck, but you don't need it.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Great poem. So realistic and playful. Full of lovely emotions. Great presentation. This is a great entry. Top contender for sure. I would wish you luck, but you don't need it.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Vanna
So pleased you enjoyed my butterfly romance poem. Truthfully, the idea started today with seeing a butterfly flitting about in my yard. Then it somehow morphed into something different for this contest. LOL
Normally my writing style is just 5-7-5. Longer verses are not in my poetry wheelhouse.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is really, really good work. You've made this sound like many things. I like the flower's response to the butterfly's touch. I love the excellent way you've presented this and thoroughly enjoyed reading this well written work. Keep writing and very well done!
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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This is really, really good work. You've made this sound like many things. I like the flower's response to the butterfly's touch. I love the excellent way you've presented this and thoroughly enjoyed reading this well written work. Keep writing and very well done!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Jeffrey,
Thanks so much for your encouraging remarks about my butterfly poem. In truth, it started when I saw the butterfly glittering about in my yard. Then it 'morphed' into another idea(-;
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written twenty five syllable poem about a woman's touch reminds of the touch of a butterfly's delicate legs lovingly touch and caress the body and her butterfly kisses do the rest.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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A very well-written twenty five syllable poem about a woman's touch reminds of the touch of a butterfly's delicate legs lovingly touch and caress the body and her butterfly kisses do the rest.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Thanks Sandra for your review and stars. In reality, the butterfly I just saw flitting about in my yard morphed into something else (-;
Comment from RodG
Now this is sensual poetry at its best. One can easily imagine this couple and the pleasure they get from being physical. The Speaker is definitely enchanted. Rod
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Now this is sensual poetry at its best. One can easily imagine this couple and the pleasure they get from being physical. The Speaker is definitely enchanted. Rod
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Glad you liked this Rod. The poem idea actually started with the butterfly flitting about me as I sat outside. Somehow it morphed! (-;
Comment from ESOSTINE
Good work and I love the imagery of butterfly and kiss. I could appreciate the butterfly kisses to mean, gentle, soft, peaceful and harmless kisses. Well captured. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing your thoughts.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Good work and I love the imagery of butterfly and kiss. I could appreciate the butterfly kisses to mean, gentle, soft, peaceful and harmless kisses. Well captured. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Thanks Esotine for your review, stars, and contest wishes. I can only imagine those butterfly kisses as being exactly as you described them. LOL
