The Thumb
a great discovery10 total reviews
Comment from RShipp
Your picture matched perfectly with your flash. ENJOYED!
I believe you have meet the requirements: Write a short story (100-500 words). The story must include a child's perspective of an object or situation.
Best of luck in the "Through the eyes of a child" writing contest.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Your picture matched perfectly with your flash. ENJOYED!
I believe you have meet the requirements: Write a short story (100-500 words). The story must include a child's perspective of an object or situation.
Best of luck in the "Through the eyes of a child" writing contest.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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thank you very much, Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is witty, cute, clever, and well thought out. It sounds like you've tended to some babies a time or two in your life. I believe you've captured their mind beautifully in this. Thanks for sharing this humorous and well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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This is witty, cute, clever, and well thought out. It sounds like you've tended to some babies a time or two in your life. I believe you've captured their mind beautifully in this. Thanks for sharing this humorous and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Yep, am a grandmother. many thanks, Jeffrey, for your kind comments. Much appreciated.
Comment from writer723
I smiled and chuckled while I was reading this story. How cute and adorable! I could visualize the baby discovering his/her thumbs. Your descriptions through the infant's eyes were delightful and spot on, I'm sure. You definitely have a way with words. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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I smiled and chuckled while I was reading this story. How cute and adorable! I could visualize the baby discovering his/her thumbs. Your descriptions through the infant's eyes were delightful and spot on, I'm sure. You definitely have a way with words. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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A Georgia gal. Good for you. I am, too, originally - though you don't know who I am. Anyway, your comments are very generous and kind and are much appreciated.
Good luck with all your aspirations!
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for the smiles! You went really way back to the beginning - to babyhood discovering the toes! Great job with this piece and all the fun onomatopoeia! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Thanks for the smiles! You went really way back to the beginning - to babyhood discovering the toes! Great job with this piece and all the fun onomatopoeia! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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I had forgotten that word - had to look it up. glad you brought it back to this old brain, and thanks for your always lovely remarks!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a cute story entry for the Through the eyes of a child writing prompt. I hope that it does well for you in the contest. Much great good luck to you!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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This is a cute story entry for the Through the eyes of a child writing prompt. I hope that it does well for you in the contest. Much great good luck to you!
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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many thanks. much appreciated.
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You're welcome.
Comment from ESOSTINE
The work was interesting to read keeping me spellbound trying to fully comprehend the message until the last dot. Thanks for sharing your thoughts. Good job.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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The work was interesting to read keeping me spellbound trying to fully comprehend the message until the last dot. Thanks for sharing your thoughts. Good job.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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thank you. baby thoughts are kind of strange. :)
Comment from mauial
Very imaginative write. Chlidhood is one of delightful discovery and you captured that thought very well with this one. This brings back memories of my younger sister. I rember my parents trying to break her of the thumb sucking when she was four or so.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Very imaginative write. Chlidhood is one of delightful discovery and you captured that thought very well with this one. This brings back memories of my younger sister. I rember my parents trying to break her of the thumb sucking when she was four or so.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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my sister as well. of course, I was perfect. kidding.
thank you for your very nice comments. much appreciated.
Comment from Eternal Muse
An adorable little story written from the POV of a child. You use the language little children use very effectively, great descriptive imagery and visuals. I love your artwork very much.
This should do very well in the contest, good luck in the booths!
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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An adorable little story written from the POV of a child. You use the language little children use very effectively, great descriptive imagery and visuals. I love your artwork very much.
This should do very well in the contest, good luck in the booths!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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thank you so much!!! I appreciate that!
Comment from Cass Carlton
You couldn't be more child orientated than this story of a bonny bairn discovering its fingers and toes for the first time. Your piece is fresh and different in its POV and the easy way the piece moves towards the inevitable finale
of baby falling asleep well done cheers Cass
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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You couldn't be more child orientated than this story of a bonny bairn discovering its fingers and toes for the first time. Your piece is fresh and different in its POV and the easy way the piece moves towards the inevitable finale
of baby falling asleep well done cheers Cass
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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thank you so very much!! and for the lovely 6! I truly appreciate you wonderful comments.
Comment from elchupakabra
The abundance of ellipsis is actually a bit detrimental to the piece, but otherwise, I thought this was a really good idea. Best of luck in the contest and two big thumbs up here. Thanks for sharing. Later daze.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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The abundance of ellipsis is actually a bit detrimental to the piece, but otherwise, I thought this was a really good idea. Best of luck in the contest and two big thumbs up here. Thanks for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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you're probably right. will see if I can fix it.
thanks