Ride of a Lifetime
A fantastical contest entry for rhythm with no rhyme scheme23 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Ride of a Lifetime
Hello, anonymous,
I like the way you described each color of the rainbow and the presentation is beautiful. It's a good entry for the
Rhythm Poetry writing prompt contest.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Ride of a Lifetime
Hello, anonymous,
I like the way you described each color of the rainbow and the presentation is beautiful. It's a good entry for the
Rhythm Poetry writing prompt contest.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for your review.
Comment from lightink
LOL! Such a fun whimsical piece with all the colors and textures - up until the big let down, that the ride was 'just' for fun...and while the ride IS real, well, the money is just fantasy! Oh the irony!
Thank you for sharing the sweet story and spicing it up with a bit of reality check :)!
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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LOL! Such a fun whimsical piece with all the colors and textures - up until the big let down, that the ride was 'just' for fun...and while the ride IS real, well, the money is just fantasy! Oh the irony!
Thank you for sharing the sweet story and spicing it up with a bit of reality check :)!
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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So glad you enjoyed - we could all use a smile these days! Thank you for your review.
Comment from harmony13
I found this poem to be very sweet and engaging. The author's words are
creative, interesting, and clear. The poem flows and connects well.
The color scheme and artwork compliment this poem well.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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I found this poem to be very sweet and engaging. The author's words are
creative, interesting, and clear. The poem flows and connects well.
The color scheme and artwork compliment this poem well.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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So glad you enjoyed - we could all use a smile these days! Thank you for your review.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a truly excellent poem--vividly descriptive, moving smoothly from whimsy to reality. The analogy of moving through the stages of life to riding the rainbow colors is very creative--then the realism: no pot of gold awaits.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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This is a truly excellent poem--vividly descriptive, moving smoothly from whimsy to reality. The analogy of moving through the stages of life to riding the rainbow colors is very creative--then the realism: no pot of gold awaits.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Well, Janice, I can safely say that you are the ONLY one who actually 'saw' where I was going with this one -- THANK YOU for your heart and your insight, my lady!! ;) You are appreciated!! ;) Take care and enjoy the remainder of the weekend! ;)
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You have a great weekend too. I REALLY liked that poem.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written rhythm poem about the ride on the rainbow with each color there are special features accompanied by a leprechaun who tells us the fib about the pot of gold.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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A very well-written rhythm poem about the ride on the rainbow with each color there are special features accompanied by a leprechaun who tells us the fib about the pot of gold.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2020
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Therese Caron
I love this poem. I kept thinking of ROY G BIV, which we learned in school to know the colors of the spectrum. I love the way each color has its own personality. The image you chose is absolutely beautiful, and this entire poem is just a very happy place. Beautiful job.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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I love this poem. I kept thinking of ROY G BIV, which we learned in school to know the colors of the spectrum. I love the way each color has its own personality. The image you chose is absolutely beautiful, and this entire poem is just a very happy place. Beautiful job.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Hooray for finding a Happy Place! So glad I could help! Thank you for this wonderful review, Therese - much appreciated.
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You are very welcome!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sweet rhyming poem with a great message for kids and adults alike, we find that pot of gold in time when we create a family, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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This is a sweet rhyming poem with a great message for kids and adults alike, we find that pot of gold in time when we create a family, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review, Dolly, although I gotta say, I'm not sure I see the rhymes you do...
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Thanks for your review, Dolly, although I gotta say, I'm not sure I see the rhymes you do...
Comment from Patty Palmer
Now that was an interesting ride! Slip sliding across the sky with all the colors of the rainbow. But I confess, I'm disappointed that there really isn't a pot of gold at the end. You're right, fantasy is for kids! Great job!
Patty
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Now that was an interesting ride! Slip sliding across the sky with all the colors of the rainbow. But I confess, I'm disappointed that there really isn't a pot of gold at the end. You're right, fantasy is for kids! Great job!
Patty
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Lol! Thank you, Patty.
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Lol! Thank you, Patty.
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You're very welcome!
Patty
Comment from Steven Hicks
It was a great idea to write the poem utilizing the colors of the rainbow as you were "riding" it.
I could see and feel the iambic tetrameter that you began with and carried through the poem. But in stanza 4 and five the order of the words makes the rhythm difficult.
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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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It was a great idea to write the poem utilizing the colors of the rainbow as you were "riding" it.
I could see and feel the iambic tetrameter that you began with and carried through the poem. But in stanza 4 and five the order of the words makes the rhythm difficult.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Beverly A McBride
I can just imagine this made into a song. I read it with rhythm, and it flowed nicely. I liked the images invoked, and the use of color and imagination. Good job. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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I can just imagine this made into a song. I read it with rhythm, and it flowed nicely. I liked the images invoked, and the use of color and imagination. Good job. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Your review is so appreciated. Have a wonderful day!
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Your review is so appreciated. Have a wonderful day!
