Destination Unknown
A clue in the photo: Where did she go?8 total reviews
Comment from Beverly A McBride
Love the gloves and heels. I hear a lot of sadness in this poem. There's a lot of loss and resignation to things that could not be changed. I like the phrase "I try to be kind as it crosses my mind, did she think of those she left behind?" It would be hard to reconcile the actions and behaviors. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Love the gloves and heels. I hear a lot of sadness in this poem. There's a lot of loss and resignation to things that could not be changed. I like the phrase "I try to be kind as it crosses my mind, did she think of those she left behind?" It would be hard to reconcile the actions and behaviors. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2020
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Thanks. It's really regrettable that there was so much secrecy in adoptions back then, but the judgment of others saw to that.
Comment from RShipp
Requirements: Look at some old photographs and write about a memory or a thought that they give you. If possible (not required) include the image in your poem.(What a clever adn creative way to seek new information!)
Enjoyed the read.
Best of luck in the Memories writing prompt contest.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Requirements: Look at some old photographs and write about a memory or a thought that they give you. If possible (not required) include the image in your poem.(What a clever adn creative way to seek new information!)
Enjoyed the read.
Best of luck in the Memories writing prompt contest.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thanks for reviewing!
Comment from Steven Hicks
I would rate it a 4 just because of the intrigue built into the story (poem). I really appreciated the rhyming pattern that you used and the 6 line stanza in the middle worked well.
However, the rhythm was broken for me when I hit the fourth stanza and it was only 4 lines and then the fifth back up to six.
Working out this mechanics would really help me with the continuity of the read.
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I would rate it a 4 just because of the intrigue built into the story (poem). I really appreciated the rhyming pattern that you used and the 6 line stanza in the middle worked well.
However, the rhythm was broken for me when I hit the fourth stanza and it was only 4 lines and then the fifth back up to six.
Working out this mechanics would really help me with the continuity of the read.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
Comment from Dick Narvett
Very powerful entry, and an interesting personal story. Two of your lines in particular strike me, as I look closely at the picture. "Is she thinking to make amends?", and "She looks happy..." . I see a woman with a lot on her mind, trying hard to smile for the camera. Just my take. And sorry, but I can't shed any light on the location.
Good luck with this entry,
Dick
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Very powerful entry, and an interesting personal story. Two of your lines in particular strike me, as I look closely at the picture. "Is she thinking to make amends?", and "She looks happy..." . I see a woman with a lot on her mind, trying hard to smile for the camera. Just my take. And sorry, but I can't shed any light on the location.
Good luck with this entry,
Dick
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem and photo that brings back memories that may not be pleasant but we still want to to know why a mother would leave her children behind.
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A very well-written heartfelt poem and photo that brings back memories that may not be pleasant but we still want to to know why a mother would leave her children behind.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
Comment from equestrik
Wow! This poem is intriquing and thought provoking. It lends itself to an emotional response as I feel for her 4 daughters left to trudge through the wreckage she left behind.
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Wow! This poem is intriquing and thought provoking. It lends itself to an emotional response as I feel for her 4 daughters left to trudge through the wreckage she left behind.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
Comment from H. Darwin Reeves
A unique way of searching for answers. Your piece describes the hurt caused by a mother who deserts her children. All legitimate questions. Unfortunately with her death those answers will be hard to find. Perhaps this picture will help. Best of luck. Thanks for sharing.
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A unique way of searching for answers. Your piece describes the hurt caused by a mother who deserts her children. All legitimate questions. Unfortunately with her death those answers will be hard to find. Perhaps this picture will help. Best of luck. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
Comment from TommyWrites
This is an excellent-although slightly sad poem! It's very touching and moving. I'm really sorry your mother left you like she did. :(
I'm happy to tell you which-and where she is in that photo! Buckingham Fountain in Chicago. I stared at the picture for a little bit, a nagging sense that I've seen that fountain somewhere (not in person, mind you). So I did some research, and found a picture of the Buckingham Fountain, and it matches perfectly! I hope this is helpful for you. :)
Once again, this is a great poem, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
TommyWrites~
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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This is an excellent-although slightly sad poem! It's very touching and moving. I'm really sorry your mother left you like she did. :(
I'm happy to tell you which-and where she is in that photo! Buckingham Fountain in Chicago. I stared at the picture for a little bit, a nagging sense that I've seen that fountain somewhere (not in person, mind you). So I did some research, and found a picture of the Buckingham Fountain, and it matches perfectly! I hope this is helpful for you. :)
Once again, this is a great poem, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
TommyWrites~
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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Thanks Tommy... good detective work. I googled the fountain just now and i see the skyline has changed a lot - so many skyscrapers!
I wonder if mother was working in Chicago or just visiting. Wouldn't it be amazing if someone from FanStory recognized her?
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Yes that would! Quite amazing indeed. Sounds like you have a good mystery on your hands! :)
