Driving Winding Roads
5-7-5 poem15 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry reads well Your image plus words pair nicely. I enjoyed reading you poem. I like the play on the word spaghetti to describe the winding roads.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Your contest entry reads well Your image plus words pair nicely. I enjoyed reading you poem. I like the play on the word spaghetti to describe the winding roads.
Thanks for sharing. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 11-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from RShipp
I love the phrase "asphalt spaghetti".
You have met the requirements of the contest: Write a 5-7-5 poem on any subject.
Best of luck with the "5-7-5 writing prompt" contest.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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I love the phrase "asphalt spaghetti".
You have met the requirements of the contest: Write a 5-7-5 poem on any subject.
Best of luck with the "5-7-5 writing prompt" contest.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a very clever use of words, to mean something that we are not quite used to from them. Thus the imagery is very strong, and the reader's imagination is called into play. Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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This is a very clever use of words, to mean something that we are not quite used to from them. Thus the imagery is very strong, and the reader's imagination is called into play. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your comments. Imagination is a very strong factor in a reader's appreciation.
Comment from jaded831
You made me feel like I was on a motorcycle, with all those twists and turns, it is a wonder I could hold down my breakfast. You poem brought me to an exciting place, got my blood going on this still morning. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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You made me feel like I was on a motorcycle, with all those twists and turns, it is a wonder I could hold down my breakfast. You poem brought me to an exciting place, got my blood going on this still morning. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2020
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The road in the photo would be brilliant motorcycling. I'm pleased i revved up your morning and glad you kept your breakfast down!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Your poem is unique and creative. I hope it does well as an entry for the 5-7-5 poem writing prompt. I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
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Your poem is unique and creative. I hope it does well as an entry for the 5-7-5 poem writing prompt. I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 11-Aug-2020
Comment from lyenochka
I do like the "asphalt spaghetti" - that is a creative take on the winding roads and because the noodles are something we eat - the connection to needing a "strong stomach" is perfect. Best wishes in the contest!
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I do like the "asphalt spaghetti" - that is a creative take on the winding roads and because the noodles are something we eat - the connection to needing a "strong stomach" is perfect. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Nice entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. Incorrect syllable count but good connection between lines. It flows well. The presentation is pretty. I like the satori line... it's clever.... Spaghetti asphalt lol
Need a strong stomach5
motoring Italian alps -8
asphalt spaghetti.5
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
Nice entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. Incorrect syllable count but good connection between lines. It flows well. The presentation is pretty. I like the satori line... it's clever.... Spaghetti asphalt lol
Need a strong stomach5
motoring Italian alps -8
asphalt spaghetti.5
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2020
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Thanks for reviewing. We'll have to disagree on the syllable count. I think you might think "Italian" is 4 syllables but it is 3 according to www.howmanysyllables.com
How many syllables in Italian? 3 syllables
Divide Italian into syllables: I-tal-ian
Stressed syllable in Italian: I-tal-ian
How to pronounce Italian: Ih-tal-yan
Comment from Kermit R. Mullins
Very well done descriptive translation of the Non-Straight roads in a lot of parts of the world, including my roads in the Appalachian mountains. "Asphalt Spaghetti" perfect mind pic. Best of luck in the contest. Best regards.
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Very well done descriptive translation of the Non-Straight roads in a lot of parts of the world, including my roads in the Appalachian mountains. "Asphalt Spaghetti" perfect mind pic. Best of luck in the contest. Best regards.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the winding roads in Italy through the Alps you need a strong stomach to see the asphalt spaghetti where you come from or need to go.
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the winding roads in Italy through the Alps you need a strong stomach to see the asphalt spaghetti where you come from or need to go.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
Comment from RodG
Oh to be young and able to drive a sports car through those Alps. Indeed the route would be challenging. I love the metaphor you used in line three. Rod
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Oh to be young and able to drive a sports car through those Alps. Indeed the route would be challenging. I love the metaphor you used in line three. Rod
Comment Written 10-Aug-2020
