The Darkness
The Dark contest entry.12 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written flash fiction about getting caught up in the dark and you are unable to know where you are going but you move slowly with care into a direction to find a safe place to wait.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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A very well-written flash fiction about getting caught up in the dark and you are unable to know where you are going but you move slowly with care into a direction to find a safe place to wait.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from RShipp
Wow. I wonder what took place BEFORE the story began? Enjoyed.
I believe you have met the requirements of The Dark writing contest: Write a story where your character is stuck in complete darkness. Fiction only.
Best of luck with the The Dark writing contest.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Wow. I wonder what took place BEFORE the story began? Enjoyed.
I believe you have met the requirements of The Dark writing contest: Write a story where your character is stuck in complete darkness. Fiction only.
Best of luck with the The Dark writing contest.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from Mia Twysted
You put the charater in a situation where there is potential danger. However, I can't visualize the story. I am being told that she is having a hard time finding her way around, but it would resinate more if I could be blind in the dark with them.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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You put the charater in a situation where there is potential danger. However, I can't visualize the story. I am being told that she is having a hard time finding her way around, but it would resinate more if I could be blind in the dark with them.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from lyenochka
You described the maneuvering in darkness well and I wonder what she bumped into that resulted in such pain. I'm relieved she made it to the bedroom okay. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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You described the maneuvering in darkness well and I wonder what she bumped into that resulted in such pain. I'm relieved she made it to the bedroom okay. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is interesting and very well thought out. I know that when it's pitch black that it's hard to even make things out that you're familiar with. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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This is interesting and very well thought out. I know that when it's pitch black that it's hard to even make things out that you're familiar with. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2020
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Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is an interesting entry for The Dark writing prompt. It should do well in the contest. I send you the best of good luck!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2020
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This is an interesting entry for The Dark writing prompt. It should do well in the contest. I send you the best of good luck!
Comment Written 08-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2020
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Thank you, my friend! Thanks for the support! I hope I win. I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Nice entry for the The Dark writing prompt contest. It's very intriguing and grabbed my attention from beginning to end. The predicament is horrendous...I can't imagine waking up in complete darkness. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
Nice entry for the The Dark writing prompt contest. It's very intriguing and grabbed my attention from beginning to end. The predicament is horrendous...I can't imagine waking up in complete darkness. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2020
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Thanks! Thank you for the support! I hope I win. I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from T.V. Hernandez
There's this feeling of suspense as Harley is trying to make her way around the house that I think gives this flash piece some potential. However, it can be improved by adding more details about Harley's emotions and what it's like to be walking around in a dark house. The more we get of this, the stronger the story can be.
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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2020
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There's this feeling of suspense as Harley is trying to make her way around the house that I think gives this flash piece some potential. However, it can be improved by adding more details about Harley's emotions and what it's like to be walking around in a dark house. The more we get of this, the stronger the story can be.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2020
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Thanks!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Finding your way in the dark can be challenging as sight is one of our most treasured senses and when we are tired we are not as aware as we should be, glad she found her bed eventually and slept on a cloud, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2020
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Finding your way in the dark can be challenging as sight is one of our most treasured senses and when we are tired we are not as aware as we should be, glad she found her bed eventually and slept on a cloud, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2020
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Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from Susan X Smith
While this poem sets an atmosphere of darkness, it would be nice to have some clue as to what was threatening Harley. Was it another person, or just an evil force? Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2020
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While this poem sets an atmosphere of darkness, it would be nice to have some clue as to what was threatening Harley. Was it another person, or just an evil force? Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2020
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Thanks! It was an evil force. You're welcome. I'm glad you enjoyed my story!