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Viewing comments for Chapter 223 " Weird Things."
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Comment from RShipp
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The buzzard said, "What? You don't scare me."
Zack replied, "You don't scare me."
My favorite lines.

I believe you have met the requirements of The Dark writing contest: Write a story where your character is stuck in complete darkness. Fiction only.

Best of luck with the The Dark writing contest.

 Comment Written 09-Aug-2020

Comment from lancellot
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Okay, I like the picture or silhouette of the bird. It has that Alfred Hitchcock vibe to it. I'm assuming its a vulture, and is representing a dark death.
But, picture aside, you need some context. I cannot award credit or a story that is not there. The blank leaves one to imagine, but then we would
create a story in our minds, and not you.

Update:

Story reposted and visible now.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2020


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
    HELLO Lancellot: I'm sorry about that. I had to rewrite that story. I cleared the page and wrote it again. The text is there now. See for yourself. Cordially rhonnie69.
Comment from AJ McCall
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I liked the rhyming of this little short, and for sure that 'I've come to kill' line sent shivers up my spine. This is a great contest entry. That image of the bird is much scarier than most will realize. :)

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2020

Comment from trimple
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Hello there, Mystery writer.

Ooerr! This has a bit of ole Poe feel about it :)

That nasty ole Buzzard up to his night-time tricks, trying to scare the living daylights out of you.

Glad you overthrew this darstardly beast.

Good luck!

Kind regards

trimple

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2020

Comment from elchupakabra
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My one comment is that this really strikes me as a poem more than it does a short story, but other than that, I enjoyed it and thought it was well done. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing. Later daze.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2020