Questionable Housekeeping
Just for the fun of the 'Question' contest...25 total reviews
Comment from elchupakabra
I'm immediately put off by all of the question marks, that part is throwing me before I even read it. Then, in reading the piece, there are parts where you are bending the phrasing into odd formats to fit a question. I think if you went with an a/b/a/b pattern as far as the question marks this would be more effective. Otherwise I still thought it was a cute, fun piece. Thanks for sharing. Later daze.
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I'm immediately put off by all of the question marks, that part is throwing me before I even read it. Then, in reading the piece, there are parts where you are bending the phrasing into odd formats to fit a question. I think if you went with an a/b/a/b pattern as far as the question marks this would be more effective. Otherwise I still thought it was a cute, fun piece. Thanks for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Changed it up a bit... Thanks for your input.
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It reads a lot better like that, glad the suggestion helped :) Later daze.
Comment from Susan X Smith
This is a cute and humorous piece and an appropriate entry for the writing prompt. This poem tells a bit of a story. The picture drew me in at once. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a cute and humorous piece and an appropriate entry for the writing prompt. This poem tells a bit of a story. The picture drew me in at once. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Many thanks for your comments.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written question poem everything that happen is mentioned with a question to make us think about how, why, where, and when everything we see have happened.
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A very well-written question poem everything that happen is mentioned with a question to make us think about how, why, where, and when everything we see have happened.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Many thanks, Sandra!
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Mystery Poet,
Well, you certainly went beyond the requirements. Rule said you needed to start or end every verse with a question. But you've made every line in every verse a question. The rules didn't say you couldn't do that.
Two suggestions,
"Did not mom say one stole your shoe?"
(Did mom not say one stole your shoe?)
and,
"Have not you seen gnomes sneak about?"
(Have you not seen gnomes sneak about?)
I sure wish we had a few gnomes to clean our house!
Good job with the writing prompt.
Cheers,
Kimbob
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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Hi Mystery Poet,
Well, you certainly went beyond the requirements. Rule said you needed to start or end every verse with a question. But you've made every line in every verse a question. The rules didn't say you couldn't do that.
Two suggestions,
"Did not mom say one stole your shoe?"
(Did mom not say one stole your shoe?)
and,
"Have not you seen gnomes sneak about?"
(Have you not seen gnomes sneak about?)
I sure wish we had a few gnomes to clean our house!
Good job with the writing prompt.
Cheers,
Kimbob
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Comment Written 07-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Many thanks, my friend, for those catches -- the pen was in hurry to meet the deadline! 8-)
Comment from Bobby Cunningham
What a fantasticly funny poem that you penned here and on top of that the rhyming is impeccable. The picture is a perfect edition to the poem, nice presentation. Best of luck in the contest.
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What a fantasticly funny poem that you penned here and on top of that the rhyming is impeccable. The picture is a perfect edition to the poem, nice presentation. Best of luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 07-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Many thanks to the both of you!
