Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "To reflect..."Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
14 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
Beautiful artwork. This Renga collection has prompted a lot of responses. Interesting thought about the eagle dining on food we cannot see. Each creature has its own unique powers. "Wisdom's feast" is great, but you might find a better introduction to that line than "It is." Maybe a strong verb. judi
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Beautiful artwork. This Renga collection has prompted a lot of responses. Interesting thought about the eagle dining on food we cannot see. Each creature has its own unique powers. "Wisdom's feast" is great, but you might find a better introduction to that line than "It is." Maybe a strong verb. judi
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Thanks so much Judy for these excellent comments and a great review, blessings, Roy
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You're welcome. Happy writing. I haven't written anything for the book yet, but I've read several of the poems. It's making a very popular collection. judi
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It is
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Roy,
Beautiful haiku to follow my couplet. You use good imagery. Dining on wisdom is a clever metaphor. Nice presentation too.
There's no connection between my couplet and your haiku. In renga, we follow the previous chapter...not all the chapters, just the one before. We don't repeat words. Please see. Example below.
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Chapter thirty eight by Gypsy Blue Rose
birds chirp at the old orchard
as sunrise marks a new day
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Chapter thirty nine by Royowen
Contemplations task
Dine on food we cannot see
It's wisdom's feast.
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Example:
northern cardinals
dine on food we cannot see
it's wisdom's feast
(The connection between my 7/7 couplet and your haiku is BIRDS but we can't repeated the same word (bird) so I use NORTHERN CARDINALS.
Thank you very much for adding a chapter to our renga book :)
Hugs,
Gypsy
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Hello, Roy,
Beautiful haiku to follow my couplet. You use good imagery. Dining on wisdom is a clever metaphor. Nice presentation too.
There's no connection between my couplet and your haiku. In renga, we follow the previous chapter...not all the chapters, just the one before. We don't repeat words. Please see. Example below.
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Chapter thirty eight by Gypsy Blue Rose
birds chirp at the old orchard
as sunrise marks a new day
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Chapter thirty nine by Royowen
Contemplations task
Dine on food we cannot see
It's wisdom's feast.
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Example:
northern cardinals
dine on food we cannot see
it's wisdom's feast
(The connection between my 7/7 couplet and your haiku is BIRDS but we can't repeated the same word (bird) so I use NORTHERN CARDINALS.
Thank you very much for adding a chapter to our renga book :)
Hugs,
Gypsy
Comment Written 05-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Would you like me to change it Gypsy? I?m quite happy you, I only read. I?ll do that anyway, thank you, blessings, Roy
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Thank you, Roy :)
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I just read it, it's very good..
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As long as it?s ok Gypsy, I will change whatever you wish, this is
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It's fine, Roy, very nice. Renga is not an easy form but it's fun and challenging. Thank you very much for being so willing to learn.
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Bless you
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and
presentation, Roy.
-It's good to see your
addition to Gypsy's book.
-A good poem and topic
with effective imagery,
personification, and message.
-A very good opening line
that's followed with the theme
of dining and "wisdom's feast."
-Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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-Nice artwork and
presentation, Roy.
-It's good to see your
addition to Gypsy's book.
-A good poem and topic
with effective imagery,
personification, and message.
-A very good opening line
that's followed with the theme
of dining and "wisdom's feast."
-Well done.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thanks Pam, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings,, Roy
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You are welcome, Roy.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 addition to the multi-author book to complete the Renga. Our souls need spiritual food on a daily basis and we can do that by contemplating God's words from the Bible.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 addition to the multi-author book to complete the Renga. Our souls need spiritual food on a daily basis and we can do that by contemplating God's words from the Bible.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thanks Sandra, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings,, Roy
Comment from Gloria ....
Whoa a very nice addition to Gypsy's renga book. I like this because it offers a contemplate side to all of nature's feast.
Great job, Roy this just keeps getting better and better. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Whoa a very nice addition to Gypsy's renga book. I like this because it offers a contemplate side to all of nature's feast.
Great job, Roy this just keeps getting better and better. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thanks Gloria, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings,, Roy
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This is stunning. The art and the meaningful words display a very thoughtful presentation. That is such an enjoyable pastime. Contemplating the past, the present or the future. All good.
Ralf
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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This is stunning. The art and the meaningful words display a very thoughtful presentation. That is such an enjoyable pastime. Contemplating the past, the present or the future. All good.
Ralf
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thanks Ralph, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings,, Roy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I am glad you contributed to Gypsy's book and I enjoyed your tasty dining here as wisdom is consumed, much enjoyed Roy, a great addition for the book, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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I am glad you contributed to Gypsy's book and I enjoyed your tasty dining here as wisdom is consumed, much enjoyed Roy, a great addition for the book, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thanks Dolly, for these comments and a great review, blessings,, Roy
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Contemplating as a dinner feast, this is quite intriguing but I sense the melancholy as a tone of changes. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Contemplating as a dinner feast, this is quite intriguing but I sense the melancholy as a tone of changes. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thanks Iza, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings,, Roy
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I agree with you, Roy. Your 575 reads well with a strong message. All people need to read this, think about it, and adhere to your spiritual message for guidance. The image is a good pairing with your well-chosen words.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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I agree with you, Roy. Your 575 reads well with a strong message. All people need to read this, think about it, and adhere to your spiritual message for guidance. The image is a good pairing with your well-chosen words.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thanks Jan, for these super comments and excellent review, blessings,, Roy
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of metaphors to convey a powerful message about the importance of seeking wisdom, because
Matthew 4:4 Jesus answered, "It is written: 'Man shall not live on bread alone, but on every word that comes from the mouth of God.'"
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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You have made excellent use of metaphors to convey a powerful message about the importance of seeking wisdom, because
Matthew 4:4 Jesus answered, "It is written: 'Man shall not live on bread alone, but on every word that comes from the mouth of God.'"
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thanks Janice, for these super comments and review, blessings, Roy