Carolina Pastorals
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Outer Banks pt.2: Venus"A celebration of North Carolina
3 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
Hi estory, this is a lovely poem and I can understand and see the attraction of a beauty stepping out of the water. But why you have to have this severe warning is beyond me. What the heck are you saying that is so offending? Please take it away and if you feel you must, just say it may have a sexual content. But do take that warning away. Please! It's a lovely poem and you're preventing so many from reading it. All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Hi estory, this is a lovely poem and I can understand and see the attraction of a beauty stepping out of the water. But why you have to have this severe warning is beyond me. What the heck are you saying that is so offending? Please take it away and if you feel you must, just say it may have a sexual content. But do take that warning away. Please! It's a lovely poem and you're preventing so many from reading it. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and your comments and suggestions. I just selected Adult Erotic as the classification. I think part of the problem here is that it hard sometimes to fit into the catagories they provide. No wonder nobody's reading it. But what else should I classify it as? estory
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Don't classify it at all. Just make a heading it has a sexual content. That's what everybody else do. By the way, I don't think you need to put any warning, at all. What is so offensive? I don't get it. Ulla :)))
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A beautifully sensual image you've painted here, E -- absolutely love the subtlety of the flow and its leading of the reader to the 'mystic' of Venus... ;) ;) However, I'm pretty sure it doesn't merit the 'big warning' for having to be over eighteen to read -- they read much more in high school lit! ;) Thanx for sharing! ;)
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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A beautifully sensual image you've painted here, E -- absolutely love the subtlety of the flow and its leading of the reader to the 'mystic' of Venus... ;) ;) However, I'm pretty sure it doesn't merit the 'big warning' for having to be over eighteen to read -- they read much more in high school lit! ;) Thanx for sharing! ;)
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your comments and suggestions supporting this poem. I just selected Adult Erotic as the classification, not realizing it came with a warning. I think part of the problem is you have to pick from the available classifications they give you. I think it would be better if we could just write a header for it ourselves. estory
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Venus was and is an unreachable symbol of beauty, sensuality and femininity. She, and her lovely successors stepping out of the waves every summer will always be cause for a stirring in the men, the onlookers. I guess the combination of the waves, the sound, taste and form of them, together with the soft roundings of bathing beauties and the warm sun makes the Venusses of today just as irresistible as in the legend.
A beautiful poem, Estory!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Venus was and is an unreachable symbol of beauty, sensuality and femininity. She, and her lovely successors stepping out of the waves every summer will always be cause for a stirring in the men, the onlookers. I guess the combination of the waves, the sound, taste and form of them, together with the soft roundings of bathing beauties and the warm sun makes the Venusses of today just as irresistible as in the legend.
A beautiful poem, Estory!
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Thanks so much for your excellent review and your perspective on my little poem. I am glad it seems to have captured that sense of beauty on the beach...estory
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It did. Thanks again.
