Lazy Morning Playtime
When it's just the two of us...20 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
A fine entry for the 3-5-3 Passion writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines... good flow too. The presentation is nice.
I like the theme about his abs. :)
Good job.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
A fine entry for the 3-5-3 Passion writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines... good flow too. The presentation is nice.
I like the theme about his abs. :)
Good job.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sensual write and filled with passion and intimacy, few words conjure up a romantic moment in time to be remembered and treasured, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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This is a sensual write and filled with passion and intimacy, few words conjure up a romantic moment in time to be remembered and treasured, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thank you bunches!
Comment from lancellot
Yeah, I remember when I had abs. I don't recall anyone resting their head down... wait- a-minute, now I recall. Okay, damn, you went hard (no pun). Those were the days, and passion was a consent companion.
Very Senryu like. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Yeah, I remember when I had abs. I don't recall anyone resting their head down... wait- a-minute, now I recall. Okay, damn, you went hard (no pun). Those were the days, and passion was a consent companion.
Very Senryu like. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Grins... wink, wink. You seem to be only one of two folks that understood.... glad you enjoyed!
Comment from Becky Kern-Taylor
I don't quite understand ripples cross my arms. I get the laughter and the smile. Good choice of words though. Kind of erotic. Are you married and how long? Ha Ha
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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I don't quite understand ripples cross my arms. I get the laughter and the smile. Good choice of words though. Kind of erotic. Are you married and how long? Ha Ha
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the stars.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Younare lucky to get time just the two of you. That should be a sure-fireway to retain passion.
You have written a poem that mixes humor and poignant notes perfectly. I like the way your text picks up perfectly on the color of part of the image.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Younare lucky to get time just the two of you. That should be a sure-fireway to retain passion.
You have written a poem that mixes humor and poignant notes perfectly. I like the way your text picks up perfectly on the color of part of the image.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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So glad you enjoyed - thank you bunches!!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is an easy to read, easy to understand poem entry for the 3-5-3 Passion writing prompt . It should do well. I wish you the best of luck!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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This is an easy to read, easy to understand poem entry for the 3-5-3 Passion writing prompt . It should do well. I wish you the best of luck!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you bunches!
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This does indeed sound like morning playtime. I like how your describing superbly the interaction, leaving room for the reader's imagination to fill in the blanks. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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This does indeed sound like morning playtime. I like how your describing superbly the interaction, leaving room for the reader's imagination to fill in the blanks. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you bunches!
Comment from poetwatch
I know knew the feeling, author. :) I'm ticklish myself. Touch me and goosebumps fly from my arms. I love it when I see a loving face and those "soft lips smile." :) This is an intimate and great offering for the 3-5-3 Passion contest.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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I know knew the feeling, author. :) I'm ticklish myself. Touch me and goosebumps fly from my arms. I love it when I see a loving face and those "soft lips smile." :) This is an intimate and great offering for the 3-5-3 Passion contest.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Oh, Jose, THANK YOU! You are only one of perhaps two reviewers that actually 'got' what I was going for here... should've known the romantic in you had the vision!! For both the awesome review and those shining stars, you are wonderful! :) Have a spectacular week!
Comment from Mia Twysted
I love the "ripples" that you have. It is such and interesting word to choose and gives a movement image that show the laughter. I can image the look that is exchanged between two people both craving the other.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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I love the "ripples" that you have. It is such and interesting word to choose and gives a movement image that show the laughter. I can image the look that is exchanged between two people both craving the other.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from elchupakabra
This is a good piece but I don't know if it really conveys your title of like a specific morning playtime thing, aesthetically the dark color matches nighttime as well. It's a very small detail though, I really like this piece otherwise. Great work, thanks for sharing. Later daze.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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This is a good piece but I don't know if it really conveys your title of like a specific morning playtime thing, aesthetically the dark color matches nighttime as well. It's a very small detail though, I really like this piece otherwise. Great work, thanks for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you.
