The Two of Me
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Comment from Pantygynt
The old proverb is stripped bare in these five, monorhyming quatrains. While it remains faithful to its rhyming pattern I could not detect any rhythmical unity with lines of different syllabic length and no recognisable consistent metre, which might have been used to suggest rolling bouncing movement.
In Q1-- Obsticles -- typo: Obstacles
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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The old proverb is stripped bare in these five, monorhyming quatrains. While it remains faithful to its rhyming pattern I could not detect any rhythmical unity with lines of different syllabic length and no recognisable consistent metre, which might have been used to suggest rolling bouncing movement.
In Q1-- Obsticles -- typo: Obstacles
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the Review and Observations, I will make the correction and use your metre suggestion in future postings.
Blessings.
Comment from oliver818
I enjoyed reading this poem. It flows well and has a nice feel to it.
I did find one mistake however- I think you mean obstacle rather than obsticle
Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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I enjoyed reading this poem. It flows well and has a nice feel to it.
I did find one mistake however- I think you mean obstacle rather than obsticle
Thanks for sharing this and have a great day
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you for the Review and spelling error observation. I will make the correction. Blessings.