Emotion's Bliss
(3-5-3) Carried away...12 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 3-5-3 Passion writing prompt.
This short piece is truly about passion.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the 3-5-3 Passion writing prompt.
This short piece is truly about passion.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
A fine entry for the 3-5-3 Passion writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines... good flow too. The presentation is nice.
This is so adorable. I remember standing on my dad's feet when we danced...not a romantic memory but same image. Good job.
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Hello, anonymous,
A fine entry for the 3-5-3 Passion writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines... good flow too. The presentation is nice.
This is so adorable. I remember standing on my dad's feet when we danced...not a romantic memory but same image. Good job.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
Comment from Patty Palmer
Oh, how one kiss can ignite the passion within a person. It can take you on a long journey leaving the feeling of love and happiness behind as pleasant memories. Good job!
Patty
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Oh, how one kiss can ignite the passion within a person. It can take you on a long journey leaving the feeling of love and happiness behind as pleasant memories. Good job!
Patty
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
Comment from lancellot
Yes, I like the first line. When it comes, it comes like waves in the ocean and you must ride that crest for get swept under by it. And the that first kiss is like heavenly bliss. Naturally that all leads to blessed passion.
So true.
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Yes, I like the first line. When it comes, it comes like waves in the ocean and you must ride that crest for get swept under by it. And the that first kiss is like heavenly bliss. Naturally that all leads to blessed passion.
So true.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is an easy to read, easy to understand poem entry for the 3-5-3 Passion writing prompt . It should do well. I wish you the best of luck!
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This is an easy to read, easy to understand poem entry for the 3-5-3 Passion writing prompt . It should do well. I wish you the best of luck!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
Comment from mermaids
You created a poem that describes clearly passion. "Passion blessed" is a perfect last line that sums up the first two lines. You did well with the 3-5-3 form. Best wishes for the contest.
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You created a poem that describes clearly passion. "Passion blessed" is a perfect last line that sums up the first two lines. You did well with the 3-5-3 form. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
Comment from Mia Twysted
I had never heard the phrase "ride the crest" so I looked it up. after knowing the meaning I see how a simple kiss would play delight between not only the lips of two individuals but through their bodies as well.
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I had never heard the phrase "ride the crest" so I looked it up. after knowing the meaning I see how a simple kiss would play delight between not only the lips of two individuals but through their bodies as well.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
Comment from lyenochka
Creatively rhymed - in this very brief poetic form! I like the picture, too, as height inequities can require that for a couple! I like that the "passion is blessed." Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Creatively rhymed - in this very brief poetic form! I like the picture, too, as height inequities can require that for a couple! I like that the "passion is blessed." Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thanks for your review. I've never had to stand on tippy-toe to be kissed as I am tall. It seems the shorter girls get all the tall boyfriends.
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Lol. That's funny. But I know short guys with really tall wives. Love overcomes the height issue.
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Love conquers all. If we let it.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 3-5-3 passion poem about the blues if a sweet kiss. Whatever it takes we have to have that wonderful lips touching our lips for a blessed kiss.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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A very well-written 3-5-3 passion poem about the blues if a sweet kiss. Whatever it takes we have to have that wonderful lips touching our lips for a blessed kiss.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from The Death
You managed to capture nice moments between two lovers. Excellent word economy as you have used each syllable well. Nice use of S consonance. Fine presentation as well. Good luck!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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You managed to capture nice moments between two lovers. Excellent word economy as you have used each syllable well. Nice use of S consonance. Fine presentation as well. Good luck!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you - I appreciate your comments.