Nightmares of Life
A 5-7-5 Poem11 total reviews
Comment from Captain Doc
The truth, are etched within the eyes of the beholder as events unfolds. Because the eyes are the gates of the beholder's Soul! The etching, are so deep that time can't erase !
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The truth, are etched within the eyes of the beholder as events unfolds. Because the eyes are the gates of the beholder's Soul! The etching, are so deep that time can't erase !
Comment Written 08-Aug-2020
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Dreams are usually where reality tries to break through first... ;) :) Definitely a great offering to convey 'horrorific' in but seventeen syllables - thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Dreams are usually where reality tries to break through first... ;) :) Definitely a great offering to convey 'horrorific' in but seventeen syllables - thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Colin John
Hi, a worthy contest entry to do with the horror of child abuse and the reaccuring nightmares they have, good luck in the competition and great choice for a horror 5-7-5. Kind regards Colin
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Hi, a worthy contest entry to do with the horror of child abuse and the reaccuring nightmares they have, good luck in the competition and great choice for a horror 5-7-5. Kind regards Colin
Comment Written 05-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Valerie Fish
Yes sadly this is so true; well summed up in just a few words. An apt title, and an emotive picture. I don't think 'Horror' needs the exclamation mark, or fits with the sentiment, same for the red font!
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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Yes sadly this is so true; well summed up in just a few words. An apt title, and an emotive picture. I don't think 'Horror' needs the exclamation mark, or fits with the sentiment, same for the red font!
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Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much, your comments are much appreciated
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 horror poem. For many who grow up in a safe environment it is hard to believe that your own parents or trusted family can do such kind of horrors to innocent children.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 horror poem. For many who grow up in a safe environment it is hard to believe that your own parents or trusted family can do such kind of horrors to innocent children.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from elchupakabra
I like the idea of the piece but there are some challenges;
Horror! is the child (needs to be adjusted as it throws the whole thing off in my opinion)
The rest of the piece is very literal as well, I think it could use some poetic device. EX:
Horror, is the child.
Wicked nightmares of abuse;
tale of black and blues.
Still, I enjoyed the piece. Good work and good luck in the contest. Later daze.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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I like the idea of the piece but there are some challenges;
Horror! is the child (needs to be adjusted as it throws the whole thing off in my opinion)
The rest of the piece is very literal as well, I think it could use some poetic device. EX:
Horror, is the child.
Wicked nightmares of abuse;
tale of black and blues.
Still, I enjoyed the piece. Good work and good luck in the contest. Later daze.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much, I like your ideas, many thanks
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a shocking write, powerful words here about the abuse suffered by children that is carried with them throughout their life. Such events are tragic and your words here are filled with sadness, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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This is a shocking write, powerful words here about the abuse suffered by children that is carried with them throughout their life. Such events are tragic and your words here are filled with sadness, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much, never thought I would appreciate a review that started with " This is a shocking write" many thanks
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Well said. Apt title. This subject is on my mind since a child just yesterday confided in me that his stepfather smacks him upside the head. Good luck. Cheers.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Well said. Apt title. This subject is on my mind since a child just yesterday confided in me that his stepfather smacks him upside the head. Good luck. Cheers.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much, abuse of any kind should not be accepted
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, this was terrific! It's horror, indeed. The most gruesome crime - child abuse. They never recover from this, and often it takes years of therapy (some freeze after the experience and won't share). Yes, they have nightmares, for years and decades.
A fantastic picture. This should do very well in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Oh, this was terrific! It's horror, indeed. The most gruesome crime - child abuse. They never recover from this, and often it takes years of therapy (some freeze after the experience and won't share). Yes, they have nightmares, for years and decades.
A fantastic picture. This should do very well in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you for you excellent and very encouraging comments
Comment from LisaMay
You have certainly chosen a horrible situation for your poem. Abuse of innocent children is one of the blights in our society.
(There is a word you need to change: it should be "whose" not "who's", because who's is a contraction of "who is", which does not fit the meaning here.)
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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You have certainly chosen a horrible situation for your poem. Abuse of innocent children is one of the blights in our society.
(There is a word you need to change: it should be "whose" not "who's", because who's is a contraction of "who is", which does not fit the meaning here.)
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you so very much, I have changed it , again many thanks