Abandoned Complex
Why does the apartment complex appear abandoned?3 total reviews
Comment from Brad Bennett
Wow, Monica, my kind of story. How dare this story be reviewed and not be given 6 stars. I was thinking she was dreaming, and in essence it was a dream, but a dream from beyond where science knows, and where mystery goes. A fantasy of a life so strong in its presence, it remained even beyond existence... But why not? We can't wander into any old house, and not sense the past residents are still there.
Well done.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
Wow, Monica, my kind of story. How dare this story be reviewed and not be given 6 stars. I was thinking she was dreaming, and in essence it was a dream, but a dream from beyond where science knows, and where mystery goes. A fantasy of a life so strong in its presence, it remained even beyond existence... But why not? We can't wander into any old house, and not sense the past residents are still there.
Well done.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you so very much! I truly appreciate your reading and reviewing, and definitely appreciate the six star rating.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a horror deluxe story. It is a good entry for the Horror Writing writing prompt. I hope it does well in the contest. I wish you the best of good luck!
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
This is a horror deluxe story. It is a good entry for the Horror Writing writing prompt. I hope it does well in the contest. I wish you the best of good luck!
Comment Written 30-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much! I am hoping it does well, also.
Comment from Roberta Lawrinsky
Dear Monica--
The story develops a theme of absence of other people in a completely convincing way.
Wherever did you get the idea?
The ending is one I never saw coming.
It's profound as well as surprising, as if she's a ghost who hasn't realized that she's died.
At least she never resorts to compulsive eating. :)
these are my humble suggestions:
The uneasiness was now growing--is redundant & also unneeded because the next sentence describes the feeling of unease much better.
She decided on a phone call to the office, hoping a human voice would settle her uneasiness.
She decided to 'lie down' & take a nap.
It's great that you're productive at this time.
sincerely,
roberta lawrinsky
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
Dear Monica--
The story develops a theme of absence of other people in a completely convincing way.
Wherever did you get the idea?
The ending is one I never saw coming.
It's profound as well as surprising, as if she's a ghost who hasn't realized that she's died.
At least she never resorts to compulsive eating. :)
these are my humble suggestions:
The uneasiness was now growing--is redundant & also unneeded because the next sentence describes the feeling of unease much better.
She decided on a phone call to the office, hoping a human voice would settle her uneasiness.
She decided to 'lie down' & take a nap.
It's great that you're productive at this time.
sincerely,
roberta lawrinsky
Comment Written 30-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your taking the time to make suggestions, and I will definitely take a look at fixing those issues.
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.. I appreciate you taking the time to make the suggestions, and I will definitely look into fixing those issues. The idea actually came from a dream that I had one night.
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Hi Monica!
Dreams are such a gift from the world of the unconscious oversoul.
Glad you're open to accepting proofreading suggestions. --roberta--