The Ball
A prince meets his future bride.7 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Now that IS quite and night and much more exciting and creative than the Cinderella story. I like that the prince and Amy found each other through their originality and that she was brave enough to free herself from the assassin's grip. Congratulations on the win!!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Now that IS quite and night and much more exciting and creative than the Cinderella story. I like that the prince and Amy found each other through their originality and that she was brave enough to free herself from the assassin's grip. Congratulations on the win!!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2020
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Awww thank you so much for reading, reviewing and your great comments, as well as the congratulations. It was a spur of the moment thing.
Comment from writer723
I really enjoyed reading your story. You painted a vivid picture in my mind of a masquerade ball. The characters you described quite well and they were likeable. I thought the costume of your heroine was very creative and imaginative. I found the story charming, cute and sweet. I was glad Amy got her Prince Ivan at the end and it was truly a happily ever after. You're really talented and I thank you for sharing your tale. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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I really enjoyed reading your story. You painted a vivid picture in my mind of a masquerade ball. The characters you described quite well and they were likeable. I thought the costume of your heroine was very creative and imaginative. I found the story charming, cute and sweet. I was glad Amy got her Prince Ivan at the end and it was truly a happily ever after. You're really talented and I thank you for sharing your tale. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much for reading, reviewing and your kind comments. The stars and wishes were great.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I like and have enjoyed this real true story how a prince meets his future bride; it has very interesting beginning with a happy ending; well said, well done, thank you for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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I like and have enjoyed this real true story how a prince meets his future bride; it has very interesting beginning with a happy ending; well said, well done, thank you for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you for reading, reviewing and your kind comments.
Comment from Dick Narvett
A fairy-tale story with a happy ending. The atmosphere of a royal ball is well developed. Some edits you may want to make before the contest:
"...the idea of a tree truck (trunk)..."
"His parents(,)being who they were(,) planned..."
"as his (he) kneeled by his father's side."
"And he has given me (an) order."
You may also want to consider changing the "criminal" to the "assassin"
Good Luck
Dick
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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A fairy-tale story with a happy ending. The atmosphere of a royal ball is well developed. Some edits you may want to make before the contest:
"...the idea of a tree truck (trunk)..."
"His parents(,)being who they were(,) planned..."
"as his (he) kneeled by his father's side."
"And he has given me (an) order."
You may also want to consider changing the "criminal" to the "assassin"
Good Luck
Dick
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you Dick, so much for reading, reviewing and your great comments. Also thank you for the suggested edit, I will make those in a moment.
Comment from papa55mike
We all need a few fairy tales to bring us back to some amount of normalcy. What a beautifully written story! Please check your paragraph breaks.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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We all need a few fairy tales to bring us back to some amount of normalcy. What a beautifully written story! Please check your paragraph breaks.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you Mike for reading, reviewing and your great, kind comments. Will check the paragraphs in a moment.
Comment from elchupakabra
This was a nice story, I enjoyed the writing and the chosen aesthetic for the piece. There are some very minor errors that need to be refreshed in editing but other than some small details, I thought you did a really good job here. Thank you for sharing, later daze.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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This was a nice story, I enjoyed the writing and the chosen aesthetic for the piece. There are some very minor errors that need to be refreshed in editing but other than some small details, I thought you did a really good job here. Thank you for sharing, later daze.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for reading, reviewing and your great comments. I will check it out in a moment.
Comment from roof35
This was a lovely Cinderella-type story. Like Amy, it took imagination on your part to come up with it. I haven't seen many entries for this so you stand a good chance of winning the contest. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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This was a lovely Cinderella-type story. Like Amy, it took imagination on your part to come up with it. I haven't seen many entries for this so you stand a good chance of winning the contest. Nicely done.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for reading, reviewing and your kind comments.