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Comment from Margaret Bednar
Oh, I LOVE this one ... about time for a little hint of a romance for Cody! This was engaging and the conversations flow so naturally and the humor is wonderful - I loved the descriptions of the artwork... Sigh. Just loved it all.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Oh, I LOVE this one ... about time for a little hint of a romance for Cody! This was engaging and the conversations flow so naturally and the humor is wonderful - I loved the descriptions of the artwork... Sigh. Just loved it all.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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You're so awesome. Thank you for always being such an encouraging friend. :)
Blessings,
Debby
Comment from roof35
Oh, how nice. Cody is returning to the living and you have a romance building. I am hoping the missing guard is not a sign that bad things are coming. See you have me into the story. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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Oh, how nice. Cody is returning to the living and you have a romance building. I am hoping the missing guard is not a sign that bad things are coming. See you have me into the story. Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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Thank you for reading and commenting! I appreciate both.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from lyenochka
So all this happened after she had coffee with Jack and Cody's mother? She said that last and then she went to visit Cody's room - so want to make sure she did what she told the kids.
Comments:
You still have " 'Lane told me' and "So she bugs Laine but you had " so you probably want to choose just one version of the name.
Sentence broken here:
couple of times now,
I'd return the favor."
The Hessman she met (Lehmann?) You have Hessman twice here but previously the bad guy was Lehmann.
This is excellent ." (extra space)
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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So all this happened after she had coffee with Jack and Cody's mother? She said that last and then she went to visit Cody's room - so want to make sure she did what she told the kids.
Comments:
You still have " 'Lane told me' and "So she bugs Laine but you had " so you probably want to choose just one version of the name.
Sentence broken here:
couple of times now,
I'd return the favor."
The Hessman she met (Lehmann?) You have Hessman twice here but previously the bad guy was Lehmann.
This is excellent ." (extra space)
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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Gracious sake1 Changed the bad guys names from draft to post and missed these? Weird. lol. But it is 2020...
Thank you for the catches. I'll go fix those right away. :)
Always appreciate you -
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Mmmm, Aby is getting closer to Cody, and in the same time she gets some close-up with the family from his drawings. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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Mmmm, Aby is getting closer to Cody, and in the same time she gets some close-up with the family from his drawings. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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Thank you for reading and commenting! I appreciate both.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from AJ McCall
i got so excited when I realized this was the second part. the setting is very good and the dialogue is always intriguing and funny, especially the 'Anniversary part'. I did notice this sentence didn't really make sense : "I know that may not help any, but ... > I know that (it) may not help any, but... And I would suggest using 'grandmother' than 'grandma'. I think it sounds better. Abby and Cody are just cute together. I can't wait to read the next chapter! (I just realized to be a top novelist on here you just need to keep posting chapters to novels lol. I'm still working on those horror shorts!)
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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i got so excited when I realized this was the second part. the setting is very good and the dialogue is always intriguing and funny, especially the 'Anniversary part'. I did notice this sentence didn't really make sense : "I know that may not help any, but ... > I know that (it) may not help any, but... And I would suggest using 'grandmother' than 'grandma'. I think it sounds better. Abby and Cody are just cute together. I can't wait to read the next chapter! (I just realized to be a top novelist on here you just need to keep posting chapters to novels lol. I'm still working on those horror shorts!)
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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Hi AJ! Hope y'all are well and safe. I know that the hurricane didn't hit anywhere close, but y'all got rain from it, right? We were hoping, but we're just too far west. I guess we got a bit, but not much at all, so still praying for a break in this drought. (There's always a drought here ...)
Glad you enjoyed the chapter. :)
Still working on shorts, too, and for a name for the book! Have to have that for the FB and webpage, so shoot me any ideas you have, por favor. :)
Thank you for reading and commenting! I appreciate both.
Blessings,
Deb
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Okay, cool! And yeah it's raining off and on right now. Better than the heat. :) Hope you get some rain soon!
Comment from Anne-Marie brison
Dear author,
Wow!!!! What an excellent piece of work!!!! Awesome job!!! Thanks sooo much for sharing this with Fanstory!!! Keep writing! !!!!!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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Dear author,
Wow!!!! What an excellent piece of work!!!! Awesome job!!! Thanks sooo much for sharing this with Fanstory!!! Keep writing! !!!!!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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Thank you for reading and commenting, Anne-Marie! I appreciate both.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from royowen
It seems that Abby is falling in love with Cody, and he's still struggling with his injuries and the stuff that IV'd him, and he's now having nightmares, but I think the relationship is growing, well done, Deb, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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It seems that Abby is falling in love with Cody, and he's still struggling with his injuries and the stuff that IV'd him, and he's now having nightmares, but I think the relationship is growing, well done, Deb, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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Thank you for reading and commenting, Roy! I appreciate both.
Blessings,
Deb
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Well done
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This post has a hint of possible romance between Cody and Abby. This story really grows on me, and I long for more posts. You are quite a good storyteller.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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This post has a hint of possible romance between Cody and Abby. This story really grows on me, and I long for more posts. You are quite a good storyteller.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Rebecca! What a nice comment. I appreciate it. :) I need to get caught up on Nellie Jo! It's been so nuts lately that I'm behind on everything, but working on it. :)
Blessings, my friend,
Deb
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That Laura, LOL. Loved that. I'm hoping that Cody and Abby will continue to meet up after he leaves the hospital. She would fit into the family nicely. His nightmares are to be expected, and I'm glad he's going to get help. Jack, too. I know if Cody will agree, Jack must too. Well done, it was such a pleasure to wake up and see you had posted again. Have a lovely day, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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That Laura, LOL. Loved that. I'm hoping that Cody and Abby will continue to meet up after he leaves the hospital. She would fit into the family nicely. His nightmares are to be expected, and I'm glad he's going to get help. Jack, too. I know if Cody will agree, Jack must too. Well done, it was such a pleasure to wake up and see you had posted again. Have a lovely day, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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We all need a Laura in our lives, don't we. lol. I have one! And, yes, her name is Laura. lol. Hope she reads this and flips. :)
Been working on church material but hope to get a new chapter up here today (or very late tonight, like I usually do).
Blessings and have a great one!
Deb
