Looking for Orion - 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Abby"Brothers fight for faith ... and for their lives.
11 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Bednar
What a lovely explanation of why we have free choice - the doll doesn't love us back. AND I loved the if we aren't Catholic, what are we... Democrat? I also liked the teasing between the head nurse and doctor... willing to trade her husband for Cody. LOL.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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What a lovely explanation of why we have free choice - the doll doesn't love us back. AND I loved the if we aren't Catholic, what are we... Democrat? I also liked the teasing between the head nurse and doctor... willing to trade her husband for Cody. LOL.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2020
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Hey, there are days I'd like to trade mine for him! lol. And don't we all need a little Laura in our lives! (I actually have one! She's so cool. lol)
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from Ulla
Hi Debora, I liked this chapter and understand all the issues arising in this chapter, but I can understand if the kids don't get it at all. How could they? Religion at best is a learned thing that will develop over years. Well, on a personal level it never developed at all, regardless of teaching or family influence. You're raising a lot of interesting issues in this chapter. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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Hi Debora, I liked this chapter and understand all the issues arising in this chapter, but I can understand if the kids don't get it at all. How could they? Religion at best is a learned thing that will develop over years. Well, on a personal level it never developed at all, regardless of teaching or family influence. You're raising a lot of interesting issues in this chapter. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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Hi Ulla! Sorry for the late response. Things are CRAZY! (everywhere, I'm sure...)
I'm glad I'm raising some interesting thoughts and quesiotns. That's what is supposed to happen, so I've at least met that part of my goal for this book. :)
Thank you for reading and commenting! I appreciate both.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from robyn corum
Deb,
I liked this chapter - I told you I wanted Abby as a love interest, so this pleased me, of course. Making nice with the man's kids will go a long way to capturing his heart even more.
I had a bit of a hard time with the kids not knowing their own faith? Or the daughter, anyway. Seemed a little weird-- but I did a test. My 4 yo granddaughter was here and I asked her what kind of church we attend. We talked for a few minutes and I realized she was clueless. She understands some concepts really well - but not that. Hmmm..
Thanks!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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Deb,
I liked this chapter - I told you I wanted Abby as a love interest, so this pleased me, of course. Making nice with the man's kids will go a long way to capturing his heart even more.
I had a bit of a hard time with the kids not knowing their own faith? Or the daughter, anyway. Seemed a little weird-- but I did a test. My 4 yo granddaughter was here and I asked her what kind of church we attend. We talked for a few minutes and I realized she was clueless. She understands some concepts really well - but not that. Hmmm..
Thanks!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2020
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It's strange what we just expect they know or hea. Our church has no denominational name, although we're Baptist. We dropped that from our name a while back because our denomination has (tratitionally) been a bunch of judgmental jerks. lol. We do like the structure of the denomination and want to be 'baptist', but don't want to turn people away with that. We don't hide it, just don't have it in our church name and, honestly, don't worship like a traditional Baptist church. So my grandkids at that age didn't know, either. Six is a weird age. My granddaughter is getting some of the main ideas and concepts, but she has no idea what denomination we are, either.
Anyhow, glad you got a good visit with the grand-girl. :)
Thank you for reading and commenting! I always appreciate it.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from lyenochka
Well, Michael and Katie are unusual kids to understand that heavy bit of theology. I think most kids would argue and still be mad about the loss of their mother and their father's injuries. But Abby has connected with the kids so seems like Abby's nurse friend might get her wish.
"Acouple of dozen" (A couple) unless you wanted for speech effect
She sat still for a minute, (I had trouble picturing where Abby was while listening to the kids. Was she standing or sitting? I thought she was just standing in the doorway.)
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Well, Michael and Katie are unusual kids to understand that heavy bit of theology. I think most kids would argue and still be mad about the loss of their mother and their father's injuries. But Abby has connected with the kids so seems like Abby's nurse friend might get her wish.
"Acouple of dozen" (A couple) unless you wanted for speech effect
She sat still for a minute, (I had trouble picturing where Abby was while listening to the kids. Was she standing or sitting? I thought she was just standing in the doorway.)
Comment Written 24-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Hi Helen. It took me a lot of years to work through my own 'Lehmann' experience to get this understanding. If the kids were real kids, they certainly wuldn't 'get it' in a single conversation. But who says even the ficitonal ones did? :)
Right after Abby enters te room, she sits down across from the kids. (I had to go back and check. lol)
Thanks for always holding me to a high standard. I appreciate that.
Blessings,
Deb
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Okay! Sorry, I missed that key movement detail. I guess I was so focused on the dialogue. Great job!!
Comment from royowen
It looks a little like Abby might fancy Cody, and she's impressed with the kids too, the ask lots of questions kids might, but Michael is a mature young man, and looks after his sister. I love the way you explain the inexplicable, the ways of God, are a mystery to us, but we know through Christ He loves beyond measure, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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It looks a little like Abby might fancy Cody, and she's impressed with the kids too, the ask lots of questions kids might, but Michael is a mature young man, and looks after his sister. I love the way you explain the inexplicable, the ways of God, are a mystery to us, but we know through Christ He loves beyond measure, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Roy. It took me a lot of years to understand all of this and, if Michael and Katie were real kids, Iknow they would'nt grasp all of that at one time. but the point of the book is to try to help people understand the inexplicable, to mend hurt hearts. So thank you. I appreciate your thumbs up. :)
Blessings,
Deb
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That's good, like you, I'm certain of the inexplicable
Comment from roof35
This is a nice tribute to Abby and her faith and to you and your faith because the latter comes shining through. This is very well written and I truly enjoy your work.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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This is a nice tribute to Abby and her faith and to you and your faith because the latter comes shining through. This is very well written and I truly enjoy your work.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Root, thank you so much for that exceptional rating and for your encouragement. Both are quite appreciated. It took me a long time to work through events in my own life to come to this sort-of-understanding of God's character, so I'm greateful that it came through in the chapter.
Thank you again,
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from AJ McCall
I love the little scene with the nurse and Abby. It's hilarious. And I was expecting Abby to actually go and talk to Cody. I guess I was wrong. I'm getting excited every time I read this! I
And there's an apostrophe in one of Abby's lines. I love this story. Can't wait to read the next chapter. (And what would be your advice to a younger emerging author who wanted to write a detective story? How'd you start yours?
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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I love the little scene with the nurse and Abby. It's hilarious. And I was expecting Abby to actually go and talk to Cody. I guess I was wrong. I'm getting excited every time I read this! I
And there's an apostrophe in one of Abby's lines. I love this story. Can't wait to read the next chapter. (And what would be your advice to a younger emerging author who wanted to write a detective story? How'd you start yours?
Comment Written 24-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Thank you, AJ, for the exceptional rating! I hope you know how honored I am to get that from you, and how encouraging it is.
And who says Abby isn't headed into Cody's room? This is just the first half of this chapter. Hold on, girl! lol
Hmm...
This started with the dream Cody had, the falling down the hill, knowing there was danger and knowing someone had him, trying to help. In my dream, it wasn't Jack, of course. Honestly, I think it was my dad. But that dream wouldn't go away, and I started to flesh it out, first figuring out why a guy would be falling down a hill with the knowledge that there was trouble, then deciding on bits and pieces. I never write straight through. I knew the ending of this before I had the beginning. Weird, huh. But I kept writing pieces until they made some sense together, then connected them. I am not really an outline writer, but I do know where I"m heading by the third or fourth segment that I write. (Usually. I have 2 books that are eluding e to date, but I'm going to get them worked out this year or early next year. Or so says the schedule. lol)
I watch a lot of detective movies/TV shows, read detective books and have a detective brother. Sorry about that last one -- cannot loan him to you. :) He's retired now, but he was a great Special Crimes guy before he got hurt and had to retire early. I also live in a hunting community, surrounded by ranchers/farmers and my husband, so finding out about weapons was fairly easy. And I do a lot, lot of research.
Is that advice? Not at all sure, but I hope that helped. Let me PM you my phone #. Not sure that a convo would help any, but I"m always available if someone needs.
I'll send that in a few. :)
Blessings,
Deb
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You're welcome! And thank Deb! And that's amazing it started with a dream! And I too usually know the ending before the beginning. I can't say I'm a outline writer or the other because I haven't been writing for a long time. This is great advice. Hopefully I have a dream for an idea! And your brother could've helped! Lol But I can research my butt off! Thanks!
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lol. You're welcome. I would also suggest some writing books/magazines. It's a never ending thing to keep leainign.
And there are days I'd letyou HAVE that brother, although most of them are many decades ago. He's sort of okay now. lol.
Keep going! You're a great writer already.
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Thank you!!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Another love lovely chapter where the human emotion of frustration is expressed. Doctor Abby is doing a good job explaining to the kids why sometimes bad things happen and why we have free will. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Another love lovely chapter where the human emotion of frustration is expressed. Doctor Abby is doing a good job explaining to the kids why sometimes bad things happen and why we have free will. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter
Comment Written 24-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Iza. So glad you're still reading and enjoying the book. :)
Appreciate your encouragement.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from Melodie Michelle
I adore the line and the characters interact together very well;-)
I appreciate you sharing;-) Thank you so much and may God bless you and your family;-)
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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I adore the line and the characters interact together very well;-)
I appreciate you sharing;-) Thank you so much and may God bless you and your family;-)
Comment Written 24-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Melodie! God's richest blessings on you and yours, as well. :)
Deb
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;-)
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This story is great as usual. I am always surprised when I get to the end so fast. I always wish for more.
Noticed a typo:
"Acouple (A couple) of dozen will probably do the trick."
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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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This story is great as usual. I am always surprised when I get to the end so fast. I always wish for more.
Noticed a typo:
"Acouple (A couple) of dozen will probably do the trick."
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Typo fixed, my friend. Thank you. :)
What an encouraging review! Thank you.
Be blessed,
Deb
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You're welcome.
