Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Pray for Rain"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
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Comment from Mark Schardine
farmer prays for rain
for drought-stricken olive trees --
resilient souls
The Mediterranean countries are known for their olive trees, and also for the adversity farmers must confront. In a beautiful sunlit country there can exist great sorrow.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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farmer prays for rain
for drought-stricken olive trees --
resilient souls
The Mediterranean countries are known for their olive trees, and also for the adversity farmers must confront. In a beautiful sunlit country there can exist great sorrow.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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I grew up in Spain where we have a lot of olive trees.
Thank you very much
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I think of Pablo Neruda and these words:
Puedo escribir los versos más tristes esta noche.
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I love Pablo Neruda
Comment from rama devi
Fine alliteration of R adds musicality to this fine addition for the book.
Good word economy, presentation and overall tone.
It's fun to read these all in a row.
Bravo.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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Fine alliteration of R adds musicality to this fine addition for the book.
Good word economy, presentation and overall tone.
It's fun to read these all in a row.
Bravo.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 24-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much, Rama Devi. I appreciate your time and lovely review.
hugs,
gypsy
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:-)))Hugs!
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Pray for Rain, part of the ongoing renga, brings the climate to an arid and hot locale where vines nee water to survive and produce.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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This haiku, Pray for Rain, part of the ongoing renga, brings the climate to an arid and hot locale where vines nee water to survive and produce.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much, Bill. Feel free to contribute to the book if you would like to. :)
Comment from dragonpoet
It is sad to see such ruined crops of any kinds. Drought is horrible and we all need to pray for rain for them too.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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It is sad to see such ruined crops of any kinds. Drought is horrible and we all need to pray for rain for them too.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Joan. I appreciate your review and feedback.
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Don't mention it, Gypsy
Joan
Comment from karenina
This follows smooth as silk from your previous 7/7 line! "Resilient souls" gives it such a powerful emotion beyond the mere action of said farmer...
I swear you must breathe these forms! I'm learning by reading...Karenina
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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This follows smooth as silk from your previous 7/7 line! "Resilient souls" gives it such a powerful emotion beyond the mere action of said farmer...
I swear you must breathe these forms! I'm learning by reading...Karenina
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Karenina. I appreciate your review and feedback.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written addition to the Renga multi-author book. It seems to make an interesting turn from where it started.
Manner mm
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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A very well-written addition to the Renga multi-author book. It seems to make an interesting turn from where it started.
Manner mm
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Louise Michelle
This sentiment hit home because we really need rain where I live. Surrounding areas got a downpour, but we just got a dribble. Now it's hurricane season and I worry about too much of a good thing. Sorry for the rant. This is nicely done - well chosen words. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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This sentiment hit home because we really need rain where I live. Surrounding areas got a downpour, but we just got a dribble. Now it's hurricane season and I worry about too much of a good thing. Sorry for the rant. This is nicely done - well chosen words. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Hello, Lou, thank you very much for your review and kind words. I hope you have a wonderful day.
Hugs :)
Gypsy
Comment from June Sargent
With this haiku you were able to tie together the desert piece with the possibility of rain, leading into the rainbow piece following this. You fixed it! Now, you can relax and see what other creative pieces members have to offer. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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With this haiku you were able to tie together the desert piece with the possibility of rain, leading into the rainbow piece following this. You fixed it! Now, you can relax and see what other creative pieces members have to offer. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Hello, June, thank you very much for your review and kind words. I hope you have a wonderful day.
Hugs :)
Gypsy
Comment from lightink
I love the momentum this project got and how it engaged a wide range of poets! I was such a great idea! And it's starting to take an amazing shape.
This, too, is a well fitting addition.
You painted a very relatable concrete image - that portrays the struggle of the land and the people - with a very fitting satori line, which talks about both. I love the 'resilient souls' - the way it suggest persevering in hardship and also acknowledges the spirit of the tree. :)
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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I love the momentum this project got and how it engaged a wide range of poets! I was such a great idea! And it's starting to take an amazing shape.
This, too, is a well fitting addition.
You painted a very relatable concrete image - that portrays the struggle of the land and the people - with a very fitting satori line, which talks about both. I love the 'resilient souls' - the way it suggest persevering in hardship and also acknowledges the spirit of the tree. :)
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for understanding the renga chapter and book. Have a wonderful day.
Hugs
Gypsy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The drought can indeed destroy the lives of farmers and their crops and we have no control over the weather and often pray for rain, another fine write for the book, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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The drought can indeed destroy the lives of farmers and their crops and we have no control over the weather and often pray for rain, another fine write for the book, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Dolly.
Hugs
Gypsy