Pandora's Box
Flash Fiction 250 words19 total reviews
Comment from Mia Twysted
A promise keep, but why does she feel the need to keep it to herself. Maybe she will try to find him and without Jim knowing. There are so many questions that you have left me with.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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A promise keep, but why does she feel the need to keep it to herself. Maybe she will try to find him and without Jim knowing. There are so many questions that you have left me with.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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Glad I left you a few questions to ponder ! thanks for sharing zanya
Comment from Bill Schott
This message in a bottle story, Pandora's Box, is a cool example of such a find which poses a question to a old heart to find something still good.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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This message in a bottle story, Pandora's Box, is a cool example of such a find which poses a question to a old heart to find something still good.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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Thanks for sharing zanya
Comment from lyenochka
Liked how in this brief story show us the different views of love. That Jim and his shares belong "in a different universe" and the narrator's heart is yearning for a romantic love and that "pandora's box" Excellent!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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Liked how in this brief story show us the different views of love. That Jim and his shares belong "in a different universe" and the narrator's heart is yearning for a romantic love and that "pandora's box" Excellent!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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Superb review zanya
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Loved your story, Zanya! You had my vote!
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HI lyenochka,
Really appreciate that zanya
Comment from Beverly A McBride
Neat story. What are the odds? Why is it that the grass is greener in another pasture? Yes. That would be a pandora's box. To open, or not to open. Hmmm. Good job. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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Neat story. What are the odds? Why is it that the grass is greener in another pasture? Yes. That would be a pandora's box. To open, or not to open. Hmmm. Good job. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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Great review zanya
Comment from Darlene Franklin
Wise woman, but the romantic in me wanted to see and kiss Jake one last time or something. Oh, the difficulty of 200 words! Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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Wise woman, but the romantic in me wanted to see and kiss Jake one last time or something. Oh, the difficulty of 200 words! Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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Great review zanya
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
That picture and your words go together well! I enjoyed this writing from beginning to end. This story should do well in the Message in a bottle contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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That picture and your words go together well! I enjoyed this writing from beginning to end. This story should do well in the Message in a bottle contest.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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Thanks for a superb review zanya
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You're welcome.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written short flash fiction about the message in a botte. In this scenario it seems like an old dream is coming true, but life changes and people too, is it wise to go back to a former lover who may not be the man you remembered.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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A very well-written short flash fiction about the message in a botte. In this scenario it seems like an old dream is coming true, but life changes and people too, is it wise to go back to a former lover who may not be the man you remembered.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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Thanks for sharing zanya
Comment from damommy
I think he left it a bit too late. But at least she knows how he feels. Best thing was to hide it away. Jim has been steady and responsible, and doesn't deserve to be betrayed. Very good story.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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I think he left it a bit too late. But at least she knows how he feels. Best thing was to hide it away. Jim has been steady and responsible, and doesn't deserve to be betrayed. Very good story.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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Great review zanya
Comment from poetwatch
I can imagine the feelings running in the heart of Jane, to hear from a love that once was and maybe still has a place, but it is best to keep it locked up. Jake a wanderer, with a lust to see the world, Jim, the now, steady,self-made, maybe a little dull, but there for you. Good decision. This is a good entry for the Message in a bottle contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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I can imagine the feelings running in the heart of Jane, to hear from a love that once was and maybe still has a place, but it is best to keep it locked up. Jake a wanderer, with a lust to see the world, Jim, the now, steady,self-made, maybe a little dull, but there for you. Good decision. This is a good entry for the Message in a bottle contest.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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Great review zanya
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good image and story.
-It flows well with good
detail and dialogue.
-I like the opening discussion
and the different attitudes
toward the note in the bottle.
-Then they are in their own worlds,
as you indicate in the story.
-It seems she still has feelings
for Jake, but she pushes them aside.
-A good ending with the reference
back to the title.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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-A good image and story.
-It flows well with good
detail and dialogue.
-I like the opening discussion
and the different attitudes
toward the note in the bottle.
-Then they are in their own worlds,
as you indicate in the story.
-It seems she still has feelings
for Jake, but she pushes them aside.
-A good ending with the reference
back to the title.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2020
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Superb review zanya
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You are welcome, zanya. Lovely new profile picture, too. Our goldfinches would love those!
