Hardship
An Acrostic- Loop Poem55 total reviews
Comment from The Death
Your descriptions capture how hardships are caused and tend to affect a soul. It's not just about the decisions, but also the time has a part to play in it. Loop poems can sound a bit choppy, but yours flows really well. Each line adds up the theme.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Your descriptions capture how hardships are caused and tend to affect a soul. It's not just about the decisions, but also the time has a part to play in it. Loop poems can sound a bit choppy, but yours flows really well. Each line adds up the theme.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you for this excellent and encouraging review, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Gloria ....
Well K, you were always one who reached for the brass ring, and you have done marvelously with this acrostic loop poem. Talk about a challenge, with the loop also being a complete loop from hardship to hardship.
I wonder why you didn't enter this into the loop contest?
Your motif is a perfect match with this excellent poem.
Many thanks for sharing today. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Well K, you were always one who reached for the brass ring, and you have done marvelously with this acrostic loop poem. Talk about a challenge, with the loop also being a complete loop from hardship to hardship.
I wonder why you didn't enter this into the loop contest?
Your motif is a perfect match with this excellent poem.
Many thanks for sharing today. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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That brass ring still hangs high, but I'll keep jumping, sometimes the contest is between ourselves and winning is receiving comments like this, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
The form of Acrostic and Loop is a challenge you have met nicely. Your thoughts on hardship are very meaningful and informative.
"Inside of a heart once beating with positives
Positives that fell to challenges of Hardship" Well said.
Ralf
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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The form of Acrostic and Loop is a challenge you have met nicely. Your thoughts on hardship are very meaningful and informative.
"Inside of a heart once beating with positives
Positives that fell to challenges of Hardship" Well said.
Ralf
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you for you wonderful comments and review, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from lightink
It's quite an accomplishment to write an acrostic loop poem, and you definitely met the tricky requirements - while you created a nice continuity in the chain of thoughts. The poem is rather philosophical than dramatic, however many word couplings are rather elegant and offer enriching imagery: "as time seems deflated', 'inhaled by shadows'.
In fact, I believe you picked the perfect form, because the loop repetition illustrate the sense of stuckness - the echos of hardship if you please.
Very well done!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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It's quite an accomplishment to write an acrostic loop poem, and you definitely met the tricky requirements - while you created a nice continuity in the chain of thoughts. The poem is rather philosophical than dramatic, however many word couplings are rather elegant and offer enriching imagery: "as time seems deflated', 'inhaled by shadows'.
In fact, I believe you picked the perfect form, because the loop repetition illustrate the sense of stuckness - the echos of hardship if you please.
Very well done!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much, yes some forms just seem to suit some words, Hard times are something we must all endure, much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from elchupakabra
I felt this way for a long time when it came to my own writing but I've recently decided to come back and it seems I was meant to read this tonight. Thank you for the work. Later daze.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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I felt this way for a long time when it came to my own writing but I've recently decided to come back and it seems I was meant to read this tonight. Thank you for the work. Later daze.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much, and I look forward to reading our work, much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Aussie
I liked the way you set this out, one line following on, telling a story as you wrote. It doesn't pay to say it will never happen to me. Life is a lesson, hardship is being at the bottom of the pile without hope. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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I liked the way you set this out, one line following on, telling a story as you wrote. It doesn't pay to say it will never happen to me. Life is a lesson, hardship is being at the bottom of the pile without hope. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Many, Many thanks Aussie, I tried hard to keep/tell a story in this form, I appreciate that you have seen this in this work, life is a lesson that is learnt and learned from, very much appreciate your wonderful comments****kahpot
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You are most welcome. When we recognize our strengths and weaknesses, it is then we can work on the weaker points before sliding into oblivion. Bless you friend.
Comment from Susan Larson
Excellent! You followed the path so accurately, not only in the reality of the process, but in the format of the poem requirements. I am in awe of your talent!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Excellent! You followed the path so accurately, not only in the reality of the process, but in the format of the poem requirements. I am in awe of your talent!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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What an encouraging review, I had hoped that the path was clear and my thoughts on the subject came through, many thanks and very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from ameen786
Hello friend, it is said that there's no success without hardship--your acrostic loop poem reflects your eloquence in each verse; thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Hello friend, it is said that there's no success without hardship--your acrostic loop poem reflects your eloquence in each verse; thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful comments, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from harmony13
The words of this poem describe hardships well. I found them well
thought out. I thought about the Corona Virus and how it has
caused hardships for many. The poem flows and connects well. The
author's choice of artwork goes well with this poem.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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The words of this poem describe hardships well. I found them well
thought out. I thought about the Corona Virus and how it has
caused hardships for many. The poem flows and connects well. The
author's choice of artwork goes well with this poem.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your wonderful comments and review, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Kahpot,
Your acrostic loop poem is creative and filled with opportunities for the reader to pause and reflect on hardship in her own life. I must admit that I haven't faced too many, and even when I did, early on in our marriage in terms of finding employment, I was so in love with my husband that my situation seemed minor compared to the hardships of so many.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
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Hello Kahpot,
Your acrostic loop poem is creative and filled with opportunities for the reader to pause and reflect on hardship in her own life. I must admit that I haven't faced too many, and even when I did, early on in our marriage in terms of finding employment, I was so in love with my husband that my situation seemed minor compared to the hardships of so many.
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
