Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Crowning Glory"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
7 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
This poem is so perfect - Rainbow's sharp, dazzling colors
sitting atop sun-struck clouds
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and your inspiration.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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This poem is so perfect - Rainbow's sharp, dazzling colors
sitting atop sun-struck clouds
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and your inspiration.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you! Appreciate you reading and commenting. :)
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from lightink
Beautiful imagery and consonance, alliteration!
I especially like 'sharp, dazzling' 'sun-struck'
Great addition to the book! :) - good follow up to the previous theme!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Beautiful imagery and consonance, alliteration!
I especially like 'sharp, dazzling' 'sun-struck'
Great addition to the book! :) - good follow up to the previous theme!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you! Appreciate you reading and commenting. :)
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from Ulla
Hi Debora, I love this continuation to the Renga book. It's beautiful and your 7-7 line poem has a wonderful imagery. I really liked it. ---- All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Hi Debora, I love this continuation to the Renga book. It's beautiful and your 7-7 line poem has a wonderful imagery. I really liked it. ---- All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Ulla! Appreciate you reading and commenting. :) I can't wait to read the entire collection when it's done.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Beautiful chapter for our renga book. You followed the rules well. I like the presentation. Good syllable count.
Could you please add the following to your Author notes?
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......PLEASE COPY AND PASTE THIS PART TO YOUR AUTHOR NOTES......
Renga is a Japanese collaborative poetry form in which poets write alternating verses of 5-7-5 stanzas and 7-7 couplets wich are linked in succession by multiple poets until we reach 184 verses.
From the renga book chapter your in, click on the ADD CHAPTER icon.
Make sure you are in the last chapter of the chain of poems. You find this out by clicking on the three arrow icon at the right top corner of the post ( >>> )
If the last poem is a 5/7/5 haiku, write a 7/7 couplet, if the last poem is a 7/7 couplet write a 5/7/5 haiku. Write about the same theme but don't repeating words. If you want to see an example, you can check out other chapters in the book..
You post your poem as usual but it will be part of the book. you can edit it and add a picture if you like. A copy will go to your portfolio and you keep your reviews.
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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Hello my friend
Beautiful chapter for our renga book. You followed the rules well. I like the presentation. Good syllable count.
Could you please add the following to your Author notes?
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......PLEASE COPY AND PASTE THIS PART TO YOUR AUTHOR NOTES......
Renga is a Japanese collaborative poetry form in which poets write alternating verses of 5-7-5 stanzas and 7-7 couplets wich are linked in succession by multiple poets until we reach 184 verses.
From the renga book chapter your in, click on the ADD CHAPTER icon.
Make sure you are in the last chapter of the chain of poems. You find this out by clicking on the three arrow icon at the right top corner of the post ( >>> )
If the last poem is a 5/7/5 haiku, write a 7/7 couplet, if the last poem is a 7/7 couplet write a 5/7/5 haiku. Write about the same theme but don't repeating words. If you want to see an example, you can check out other chapters in the book..
You post your poem as usual but it will be part of the book. you can edit it and add a picture if you like. A copy will go to your portfolio and you keep your reviews.
.....END OF COPY AND PASTE SECTION.....
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you Gypsy! I'm so grateful that you created this. I've been reading along with the book and finally just had to take the plunge. :)
The section is added to my author notes. :)
Blessings,
Deb
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feel free to add more chapters if you want to. :)
Comment from lyenochka
Ooooh! I like it! Great use of alliteration and I like the powerful expression of "sun-struck clouds" as it's the sunlight striking the water particles that gives us that rainbow!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Ooooh! I like it! Great use of alliteration and I like the powerful expression of "sun-struck clouds" as it's the sunlight striking the water particles that gives us that rainbow!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Helen! I hoped that would 'shine' through. :) I always appreciate your sharp mind and reviews, even if you don't find errors! (Or, maybe, even more when you don't. Nah ... not more. Equally. lol)
Be blessed this week, Helen!
Deb
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Title - excellent
Unusual to see the rainbow above the clouds, and not below, clever of you to notice.
I see the colours as dazzling, no problem there. But not sharp (although this could be a problem of my eyes).
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Title - excellent
Unusual to see the rainbow above the clouds, and not below, clever of you to notice.
I see the colours as dazzling, no problem there. But not sharp (although this could be a problem of my eyes).
Comment Written 20-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Hi Katherine! I have an eye issue, too so cannot actually SEE rainbows. Not sharp? oooppps... lol. We're going to call this poetic license, then. And, of COURSE I did it intentionally. lol
Thank you! Appreciate you reading and commenting. :)
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from AJ McCall
Wow, I love that the cross - almost hidden in the flag... Love the purple outline and the bright yellow. I pray for our country every night. Love this poem!! Hope you're staying cool!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Wow, I love that the cross - almost hidden in the flag... Love the purple outline and the bright yellow. I pray for our country every night. Love this poem!! Hope you're staying cool!
Comment Written 20-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Cool? Is that an option right now? lol. It was 102 yesterday instead of 108, so I guess we'll call that cool. lol.
Thank you for the exceptional rating for this, AJ. I appreciate you so much.
Blessings,
Deb
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You're welcome!