Renga Multi-Author Book
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Twilight tints"Renga is a Japanese linked poetry 5/7/5 and 7/7
6 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Love that second line! I felt the coolness of the breeze rippling across the water. Fine continuance after the red-wine tinted dusk and the autumn colors...well done.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Love that second line! I felt the coolness of the breeze rippling across the water. Fine continuance after the red-wine tinted dusk and the autumn colors...well done.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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A most encouraging review -thanks for reading zanya
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:-)))
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This is a lovely presentation. Twilight and Sunset are perhaps the most beautiful times of the day. This evokes the many scenes I have witnessed in the past.
Ralf
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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This is a lovely presentation. Twilight and Sunset are perhaps the most beautiful times of the day. This evokes the many scenes I have witnessed in the past.
Ralf
Comment Written 19-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Thanks for reading and sharing zanya
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My pleasure!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Twilight tints
by zanya
Hello, zanya,
Beautiful renga couplet. Good syllable count and connection between lines. I love the presentation too.
Please copy this in your author notes....
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If you want to contribute a chapter, please copy and paste this to your author notes....
Renga is Japanese collaborative poetry in which alternating stanzas, of 5-7-5 stanza and 7-7 couplets are linked in succession by multiple poets. The most famous renga master was Matsuo Basho.
Guest poets check the last stanza in the renga book to know what to write next.
Try not to repeat words from one stanza to the next.
Renga starts with first chapter, Pigeon Plum Flowers a #1-- 5/7/5 haiku.
Followed by a #1-- 7/7 couplet that relates to #1 haiku
Followed by a #2-- 5/7/5 stanza that relates to #1-- 7/7 couplet
Followed by a #2-- 7/7 couplet that relates to #2-- 5/7/5
.....repeated up to 100 stanzas Source: Wikipedia
To contribute to this book, just click on the icon ADD CHAPTER. If you need help, please contact Gypsy Blue Rose. You post your poem as usual but it will be part of the book. you can edit it and add a picture if you like. A copy will go to your portfolio and you keep your reviews.
The language is often pastoral, incorporating words and images associated with seasons, nature, and love. In order for the poem to achieve its trajectory, each poet writes a new stanza that leaps from only the stanza preceding it. This leap advances both the thematic movement as well as maintaining the linking component. Source: Poets.org
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Twilight tints
by zanya
Hello, zanya,
Beautiful renga couplet. Good syllable count and connection between lines. I love the presentation too.
Please copy this in your author notes....
,...........
If you want to contribute a chapter, please copy and paste this to your author notes....
Renga is Japanese collaborative poetry in which alternating stanzas, of 5-7-5 stanza and 7-7 couplets are linked in succession by multiple poets. The most famous renga master was Matsuo Basho.
Guest poets check the last stanza in the renga book to know what to write next.
Try not to repeat words from one stanza to the next.
Renga starts with first chapter, Pigeon Plum Flowers a #1-- 5/7/5 haiku.
Followed by a #1-- 7/7 couplet that relates to #1 haiku
Followed by a #2-- 5/7/5 stanza that relates to #1-- 7/7 couplet
Followed by a #2-- 7/7 couplet that relates to #2-- 5/7/5
.....repeated up to 100 stanzas Source: Wikipedia
To contribute to this book, just click on the icon ADD CHAPTER. If you need help, please contact Gypsy Blue Rose. You post your poem as usual but it will be part of the book. you can edit it and add a picture if you like. A copy will go to your portfolio and you keep your reviews.
The language is often pastoral, incorporating words and images associated with seasons, nature, and love. In order for the poem to achieve its trajectory, each poet writes a new stanza that leaps from only the stanza preceding it. This leap advances both the thematic movement as well as maintaining the linking component. Source: Poets.org
Comment Written 18-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Great idea the Renga author book & thanks for reading zanya
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Zanya!
Those days of which you write will be upon us soon! A well-crafted couplet that bodes of saying farewell to summer and welcoming autumn.
A beautiful rendering is so few syllables!
thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Hello Zanya!
Those days of which you write will be upon us soon! A well-crafted couplet that bodes of saying farewell to summer and welcoming autumn.
A beautiful rendering is so few syllables!
thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 18-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Thanks for a great review zanya
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My pleasure!
diane
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Fresh and lovely--the tinting twilight earns your stars right there. If that delightful image hadn't done the trick, the breezes rippling the shore would have. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Fresh and lovely--the tinting twilight earns your stars right there. If that delightful image hadn't done the trick, the breezes rippling the shore would have. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 18-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Great review zanya
Comment from lyenochka
Loved your beautiful imagery of evening. You painted the colors with "Twilight tints" and I loved the "cooler breezes ripple shore" so we can see the effects in the sky and sea and feel that it's evening!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Loved your beautiful imagery of evening. You painted the colors with "Twilight tints" and I loved the "cooler breezes ripple shore" so we can see the effects in the sky and sea and feel that it's evening!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
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Great review zanya