While Shopping at Walmart
Senryu contest entry5 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is so funny. When I think of myself I do not think of my age. I had a couple of funny experiences when I read about a 69 year old man who go stuck walking in deep snow. I said, "that poor old man." I was 71. Then another time a 70 year old woman got tied up and stuff taken from her home. She quickly got out after they left and the [olice soon caught the kids. I sighed and said,
"that poor old woman," I was 71. I'm sure many readers will laugh and identify with the character in your poem.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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This is so funny. When I think of myself I do not think of my age. I had a couple of funny experiences when I read about a 69 year old man who go stuck walking in deep snow. I said, "that poor old man." I was 71. Then another time a 70 year old woman got tied up and stuff taken from her home. She quickly got out after they left and the [olice soon caught the kids. I sighed and said,
"that poor old woman," I was 71. I'm sure many readers will laugh and identify with the character in your poem.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank you for the great review and chuckle, Liz. I'm glad you liked my silly little piece. Have a wonderful rest of your weekend.
Ron
Comment from Eternal Muse
I just read your entry to the contest - it is hilarious! Loved your humor and wit, the imagery, as well as the presentation and picture.
Good luck in the contest - this is a bomb!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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I just read your entry to the contest - it is hilarious! Loved your humor and wit, the imagery, as well as the presentation and picture.
Good luck in the contest - this is a bomb!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2020
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Thank you for the great review and generous stars, Eternal M. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
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Congratulations on this poem coming second in the contest.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a good humorous entry for the Senryu writing prompt. That is exactly how I would react too! I hope this poem does well in the contest. Best of luck to you.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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This is a good humorous entry for the Senryu writing prompt. That is exactly how I would react too! I hope this poem does well in the contest. Best of luck to you.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you for the great review and I generous stars and good luck wishes, Rebecca. I'm glad you liked this silly piece.
Comment from rspoet
Nice little bit of humor in your 5-7-5 senryu.
Shopping at Walmart can be a chaotic experience
in many ways. Mirrors are not often flattering.
Nicely done.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Nice little bit of humor in your 5-7-5 senryu.
Shopping at Walmart can be a chaotic experience
in many ways. Mirrors are not often flattering.
Nicely done.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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I really appreciate the fantastic review and stars, Robert. I'm glad you liked my silly little offering.
Comment from humpwhistle
The funny thing is, I can fully believe it. Dang, is right.
I've learned to duck mirrors, so, when I come face-to-face with one,
I'm always thunderstruck. It seems sort of sadistic that others can see our disintegration better than we do.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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The funny thing is, I can fully believe it. Dang, is right.
I've learned to duck mirrors, so, when I come face-to-face with one,
I'm always thunderstruck. It seems sort of sadistic that others can see our disintegration better than we do.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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lol. Yeah, we don't want to acknowledge what the mirror shows us sometimes. I really appreciate the hilarious review and generous stars, Lee. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Have yourself a great weekend.
