Untamed Love
A senryu3 total reviews
Comment from rhonnie69
CIAO POET: Ha ha ha...you made me laugh. NO! All that glitters is, NOT," gold.
At times...it is better for us to follow our, (better judgement,) instinct. When I met my girlfriend...I followed my, (better judgement,) instinct. I told her, "There is enough that I don't know...to create another universe. I don't know everything...but I, "DO," know,,"HER," my soulmate when I see her." Boldly, I ventured into her lair...and ,"SO FAR," she has treated me fair. Tis a, "MILD", afair. Ha ha ha. She always knows how to make me know how to make her smile. P.S. By the way...isn't that, "TONY," the tiger in the pic? "Tsk tsk tsk. Perhaps I have need to remind her that I am, "LEO." I am her lion...who helps her with the cubs. "TONY," is a phony...and-or, a, "WILD," affair. My girlfriend and me..."A PERFECT PAIR." CIAO, POET. God bless you. Cordially: rhonnie69.
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CIAO POET: Ha ha ha...you made me laugh. NO! All that glitters is, NOT," gold.
At times...it is better for us to follow our, (better judgement,) instinct. When I met my girlfriend...I followed my, (better judgement,) instinct. I told her, "There is enough that I don't know...to create another universe. I don't know everything...but I, "DO," know,,"HER," my soulmate when I see her." Boldly, I ventured into her lair...and ,"SO FAR," she has treated me fair. Tis a, "MILD", afair. Ha ha ha. She always knows how to make me know how to make her smile. P.S. By the way...isn't that, "TONY," the tiger in the pic? "Tsk tsk tsk. Perhaps I have need to remind her that I am, "LEO." I am her lion...who helps her with the cubs. "TONY," is a phony...and-or, a, "WILD," affair. My girlfriend and me..."A PERFECT PAIR." CIAO, POET. God bless you. Cordially: rhonnie69.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2020
Comment from rspoet
You've written an excellent 5-7-5 poem for the senryu contest
with the nice addition of the three rhymes.
From the looks of the art work, it would definitely be one wild affair.
Well done.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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You've written an excellent 5-7-5 poem for the senryu contest
with the nice addition of the three rhymes.
From the looks of the art work, it would definitely be one wild affair.
Well done.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you for the kind review ..
..actually I was told that this format should not rhyme ..
I m still leaning The various genres ..
hopefully that won?t play against me when people vote.
Keep safe !
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Haiku doesn't rhyme, sometimes senryu follows the same rules, though I doubt most on FS will notice.
Good luck
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Hopefully not ( ( biggrin )
and thank you ...
All the best for the weekend !
Comment from January L'Angelle
I like this senryu that you have written. The idea goes perfectly with the picture, which tells the story so well. Instinct being the tiger and the lair belonging to the woman... quite clever and very seductive. Well done! -January L. :)
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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I like this senryu that you have written. The idea goes perfectly with the picture, which tells the story so well. Instinct being the tiger and the lair belonging to the woman... quite clever and very seductive. Well done! -January L. :)
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you for such a detailed review ... I appreciate the positive feedback
Hopefully others will enjoy the read too.
Stay safe!!
