Just a Blur
A Senryu for the contest9 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a good cautionary tale. I am grateful I am a bit like a puddle. I sit outside in my chair reading and pausing to watch the butterflies, birds, and bees. I am so lucky. I have a friend who has ADDHD. She is always moving doing something. If she's tired and needs a day to rest, she can't do it. But somehow she does notice her hummingbirds. In spite of her frenetic behavior, she does find a moment to appreciate her surroundings.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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This is a good cautionary tale. I am grateful I am a bit like a puddle. I sit outside in my chair reading and pausing to watch the butterflies, birds, and bees. I am so lucky. I have a friend who has ADDHD. She is always moving doing something. If she's tired and needs a day to rest, she can't do it. But somehow she does notice her hummingbirds. In spite of her frenetic behavior, she does find a moment to appreciate her surroundings.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
A fine entry for the
Senryu writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines. You followed the rules of the contest well.
Stop to smell the roses.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Hello, anonymous,
A fine entry for the
Senryu writing prompt contest. Good syllable count and connection between lines. You followed the rules of the contest well.
Stop to smell the roses.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your encouraging comments!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoy the sentiment in these words, we must stop and witness nature and everything that is around us, when we dash about we miss the best things in life, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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I enjoy the sentiment in these words, we must stop and witness nature and everything that is around us, when we dash about we miss the best things in life, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Glad you enjoyed this piece.
Always nice to hear your thoughts.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a good entry for the Senryu writing prompt. That is exactly how life is if we rush through without noticing details. I hope this poem does well in the contest. Best of luck to you.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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This is a good entry for the Senryu writing prompt. That is exactly how life is if we rush through without noticing details. I hope this poem does well in the contest. Best of luck to you.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you for the positive and encouraging feedback!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
The senryu may deal with human nature. Your well-written piece certainly does this. We miss so much hurrying through life--then regret that later when we can't fix it.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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The senryu may deal with human nature. Your well-written piece certainly does this. We miss so much hurrying through life--then regret that later when we can't fix it.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thank you for sharing your encouraging thoughts on this piece. I appreciate it!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Senryu writing prompt.
This short verse is well done and the artwork amazing. I think I might reverse the order of the here and there, but otherwise, well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the Senryu writing prompt.
This short verse is well done and the artwork amazing. I think I might reverse the order of the here and there, but otherwise, well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thank you for sharing your encouraging thoughts on this piece. I appreciate it!
Comment from Lobber
Hi there
clever use of colored GIF in a basically blurry black and white world. Hard to tell if she running or dancing - regardless, it works.
- Lobber
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Hi there
clever use of colored GIF in a basically blurry black and white world. Hard to tell if she running or dancing - regardless, it works.
- Lobber
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Always appreciate your honest reviews!
Comment from Earl Corp
Not usually a fan of senryu poetry, but I liked yours. It made sense and gave off the same message as Stop and Smell the Roses. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Not usually a fan of senryu poetry, but I liked yours. It made sense and gave off the same message as Stop and Smell the Roses. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What an amazing animated image--love it. You are right about not seeing the beauty of life because we rush around and miss the tiniest beautiful 'thing.' I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Author. Good on the style of the senyru.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
ð??? Jan
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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What an amazing animated image--love it. You are right about not seeing the beauty of life because we rush around and miss the tiniest beautiful 'thing.' I enjoyed your contest entry, Mystery Author. Good on the style of the senyru.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
ð??? Jan
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Thank you!
