My Mysterious Garden
About gardening and the future25 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Darren,
I like your interesting poem. I like the garden/life metaphor. We all have our own priorities in life. It's kind of long.
Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Hello, Darren,
I like your interesting poem. I like the garden/life metaphor. We all have our own priorities in life. It's kind of long.
Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Why Gypsy, long time!
Thanks your review really made my day even my microphone is working on my phone again, thank you so much for your warm comments. You see I tried to truncate it a little bit but couldn't find any breaks in the consciousness or flow.
Thanks again, it was so good to hear from you old friend~
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
~Darren~
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This poem speaks metaphorically, still vividly and in a free flow of thoughts, artistically tells our life is like a mysterious garden, only a good gardener who wishes to offer everything the user would require, God would help at gardener's profitable gardening; and a committed gardener reveals mysteries of gardening to the needed; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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This poem speaks metaphorically, still vividly and in a free flow of thoughts, artistically tells our life is like a mysterious garden, only a good gardener who wishes to offer everything the user would require, God would help at gardener's profitable gardening; and a committed gardener reveals mysteries of gardening to the needed; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much for your input and continued support here in this Godly space.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Comment from Paul McFarland
Great material, but too long. You should also clean up the meter. After you write a poem, you should set it aside for a week or two. When you come back to it, you will make changes.
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reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Great material, but too long. You should also clean up the meter. After you write a poem, you should set it aside for a week or two. When you come back to it, you will make changes.
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Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much for your time and consideration on this, I really appreciate your help and support here.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting poem. A fairly smooth read, imagery that is consistent, words that fit the subject well. The forward movement of the poem is uninterrupted.
Suggestions:
You more hint that state your conclusion. I think your allusion is to God, bet it is never clearly stated. I would suggest also that you spend more time working on making rhyme fit easily into the poem. For example "Much like a stitch, or suture
that's pulled so tight, black" where the adjective is five words after the noun it modifies. This type of structure causes readers to pause to locate the noun.
A good read. Peace.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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An interesting poem. A fairly smooth read, imagery that is consistent, words that fit the subject well. The forward movement of the poem is uninterrupted.
Suggestions:
You more hint that state your conclusion. I think your allusion is to God, bet it is never clearly stated. I would suggest also that you spend more time working on making rhyme fit easily into the poem. For example "Much like a stitch, or suture
that's pulled so tight, black" where the adjective is five words after the noun it modifies. This type of structure causes readers to pause to locate the noun.
A good read. Peace.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much for your input and help with my writing. My only regret is that I have no more nominations, as this definitely deserved one!
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
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You are welcome.
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I have edited a bit, won't you please take a look and tell me what you think?
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Improved. I suggest reading your poems aloud and finding out how they sound. Try to keep the grammar clear.
Here is an example:
You wrote:
But alas, there didn't seem to be
to these tasks very much fun"
Now try this and see if it sounds better:
But alas it doesn't appear
that these tasks contain much fun.
Have a good day.
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Thank you so much for taking the time to help me out!
Comment from Teri7
Bro. Badger, This is a very well written and very interesting poem you have penned about your mysterious garden. You used very good descriptive words. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Bro. Badger, This is a very well written and very interesting poem you have penned about your mysterious garden. You used very good descriptive words. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Thank you Terry blessings I really appreciate your comments.
Review For My Mysterious Garden
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An interesting and well written poem. The garden and toil are a metaphor for life itself, and your poem also speaks of our priorities, and the end result of our labour. I felt it would be even more powerful if it were shorter but still had the same message. Well done. Great poem.
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The Bible wisely advises us to do all that we can while we yet live because in the grave there is no thought, no devising, no movement, not anything. The future is bright for some who will qualify for resurrection. Who will the cut is not up to us, we can only hope to either survive the end times or hopefully be chosen to be among the resurrected. So them while we yet live we must garden as if our very lives depended upon it.
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Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
~ ? : - D ~
Comment from Wendy G
An interesting and well written poem. The garden and toil are a metaphor for life itself, and your poem also speaks of our priorities, and the end result of our labour. I felt it would be even more powerful if it were shorter but still had the same message. Well done. Great poem.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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An interesting and well written poem. The garden and toil are a metaphor for life itself, and your poem also speaks of our priorities, and the end result of our labour. I felt it would be even more powerful if it were shorter but still had the same message. Well done. Great poem.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for your comments they are greatly appreciated I look forward to Future collaboration with you here.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
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Comment from nomi338
The Bible wisely advises us to do all that we can while we yet live because in the grave there is no thought, no devising, no movement, not anything. The future is bright for some who will qualify for resurrection. Who will the cut is not up to us, we can only hope to either survive the end times or hopefully be chosen to be among the resurrected. So them while we yet live we must garden as if our very lives depended upon it.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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The Bible wisely advises us to do all that we can while we yet live because in the grave there is no thought, no devising, no movement, not anything. The future is bright for some who will qualify for resurrection. Who will the cut is not up to us, we can only hope to either survive the end times or hopefully be chosen to be among the resurrected. So them while we yet live we must garden as if our very lives depended upon it.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Words of wisdom. It says in Proverbs harsh words stirr up anger, but sweet words are like honeycomb from the lips.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
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Comment from Begin Again
You've put a lot of thought, heart, and faith into this well-written poem, and it was a pleasure to share it with you. Life is our garden, and we are responsible for what we plant, sow and weed from it. Our blessings are bestowed from our Lord, but it is up to us to follow his word. Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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You've put a lot of thought, heart, and faith into this well-written poem, and it was a pleasure to share it with you. Life is our garden, and we are responsible for what we plant, sow and weed from it. Our blessings are bestowed from our Lord, but it is up to us to follow his word. Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Dear Carol, abundant smiles back at you. Your words are honey to my honeycomb. Thank you so much for your supportive words of encouragement I need all the help I can get right now.
Blessings,
Brother Badger 🦡 Cull
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Comment from dragonpoet
This seems to be a poem about love and sharing the gardens each of you have. It you spend to much on your garden, your partner is ingored and the relatonship ends. We should help each other with weeding each other's gardens to make each other stronger and let love grow.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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This seems to be a poem about love and sharing the gardens each of you have. It you spend to much on your garden, your partner is ingored and the relatonship ends. We should help each other with weeding each other's gardens to make each other stronger and let love grow.
Keep writing and stay healthy
dragonpoet
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Hey dragon poet, thank you so much for your continued support here and help I really appreciate your comments.
Blessings,
Brother Badger 🦡 Cull
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You are most kindly welcome, Cull.
Joan
Comment from Dilettante junior
Dear Poet,
What an outstanding poem my friend! Your words transcend barriers, generations, thoughts. Many often praise the highs of love but forget to talk about an equal pain which is felt sometimes. Pain of something real rendered unreal whether on purpose or for reasons we will never know...what could have been. Most of the time it isnt about us but about them... All I know if it was meant to be, it would definitely find a way back or else someone better is yet to come. Picking up the pieces is the hardest thing to do but is definitely worth it.
I find great comfort in your words which touch beyond the ordinary.
Well done,
Cheers,
DJ
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Dear Poet,
What an outstanding poem my friend! Your words transcend barriers, generations, thoughts. Many often praise the highs of love but forget to talk about an equal pain which is felt sometimes. Pain of something real rendered unreal whether on purpose or for reasons we will never know...what could have been. Most of the time it isnt about us but about them... All I know if it was meant to be, it would definitely find a way back or else someone better is yet to come. Picking up the pieces is the hardest thing to do but is definitely worth it.
I find great comfort in your words which touch beyond the ordinary.
Well done,
Cheers,
DJ
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Dear DJ, says it in Proverbs that a horse word can stir up anger but a soft answer is like honey to the lips. Your words of encourage me and I appreciate your review more than I can say with words so let me just say thank you so much.
Blessings,
Brother Badger 🦡 Cull
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