Falling Unexpectedly In Love
Unexpected Romance contest entry4 total reviews
Comment from Beverly A McBride
Don't you just love love? How many times has this happened? I wonder if "drift" into love is the beginning, and real love gets deeper as you go along. Nicely done story. 1972, wow, thinking back, those were powerful days. Oh, to start over from there in the love department! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Don't you just love love? How many times has this happened? I wonder if "drift" into love is the beginning, and real love gets deeper as you go along. Nicely done story. 1972, wow, thinking back, those were powerful days. Oh, to start over from there in the love department! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thanks! I hope to win. I'm crossing my fingers. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem!
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You're welcome.
Comment from Karen Estep
Good writing and quote a relatable subject. I think at sometime or another we have all wondered about having a relationship with a friend. Your graphic was very good, you also could have used a picture of two birds.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Good writing and quote a relatable subject. I think at sometime or another we have all wondered about having a relationship with a friend. Your graphic was very good, you also could have used a picture of two birds.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from Badger_29
Here I will I gave this 6 because of its flow form slightly humorous. The rhyme and meter worked well together oh, well I did find one misspelled word that you need to fix to make it look professional :
that way,
it is thier friends say,
it was hard for them to accept it,
but they sure did love it.
I also have an alternate wording for you to consider:
Henry never thought of falling in love,
with Lisa, his best friend,
It seemed that every time he sees her, here comes the doves from above.
We tried to catch her eye but it seemed that she wouldn't bend.
For the last paragraph maybe this suggestion
My how things change
so fast,
If they thought about each other this way, in the past it was absurd
But as everything turned about,
they are now love birds.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Here I will I gave this 6 because of its flow form slightly humorous. The rhyme and meter worked well together oh, well I did find one misspelled word that you need to fix to make it look professional :
that way,
it is thier friends say,
it was hard for them to accept it,
but they sure did love it.
I also have an alternate wording for you to consider:
Henry never thought of falling in love,
with Lisa, his best friend,
It seemed that every time he sees her, here comes the doves from above.
We tried to catch her eye but it seemed that she wouldn't bend.
For the last paragraph maybe this suggestion
My how things change
so fast,
If they thought about each other this way, in the past it was absurd
But as everything turned about,
they are now love birds.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Thank you, my friend! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem! Thank you for the six stars! I changed it! Thanks again!
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awesome glad you liked my ideas and you Jenna a little bit differently not exactly as I worded it. However, I believe it's important for you to add the word now to the last line so instead of reading we are love birds it will say to think of each other in the way and attached was absurd but things have changed and we are now lovebird. Emphasizing the proper spacing time using the proper subjective timer fence blown at and it helps the syllable count
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL!! And sometimes it just happens that way .... sneaks up on ya and grabs you with its beauty and intrigue!! ;) Good for Henry and Lisa! ;) Thanx for sharing them and best of luck! ;)
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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LOL!! And sometimes it just happens that way .... sneaks up on ya and grabs you with its beauty and intrigue!! ;) Good for Henry and Lisa! ;) Thanx for sharing them and best of luck! ;)
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem!
