A Mother's Warning
75-word Flash28 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
Hysterical. This would sure scare a virginal girl. But apparently, the two lovers have already done the missionary position. I laughed at the opening. That's what my mother told me.
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Hysterical. This would sure scare a virginal girl. But apparently, the two lovers have already done the missionary position. I laughed at the opening. That's what my mother told me.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2020
Comment from F. William Lester
I loved it! Martin's closing comments completely caught me off guard. LOL!!! Very well written. The beginning was the perfect setup for ending. I kept wondering where the sexual content was until I tripped over it. Thanks for the read.
Good luck. Good writing.
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I loved it! Martin's closing comments completely caught me off guard. LOL!!! Very well written. The beginning was the perfect setup for ending. I kept wondering where the sexual content was until I tripped over it. Thanks for the read.
Good luck. Good writing.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2020
Comment from Tpa
You have followed the guidelines of flash fiction very well. A good theme and good and funny ending that many mothers would expound upon that warning, but then would many daughters heed to it. Good Luck.
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You have followed the guidelines of flash fiction very well. A good theme and good and funny ending that many mothers would expound upon that warning, but then would many daughters heed to it. Good Luck.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2020
Comment from BethShelby
Yikes! I wasn't expecting that and I'm sure Debbie wasn't either. Of course Flash fiction is made for surprises so I can't fault you for that one. I see there a warning on it besides the Mother's. LOL
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Yikes! I wasn't expecting that and I'm sure Debbie wasn't either. Of course Flash fiction is made for surprises so I can't fault you for that one. I see there a warning on it besides the Mother's. LOL
Comment Written 08-Jul-2020
Comment from Susan Larson
What a whammy of an ending! I did not see that coming! Especially with that dramatic passionate 1940's looking photograph. What a dose of realism! Really hope you win!
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What a whammy of an ending! I did not see that coming! Especially with that dramatic passionate 1940's looking photograph. What a dose of realism! Really hope you win!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Love the ending, what a twist;-)
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this 75 word flash fiction. It was well written and you can easily follow this story;-)
I appreciate and thank you so very much for sharing and may God bless you and your family;-)
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Love the ending, what a twist;-)
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this 75 word flash fiction. It was well written and you can easily follow this story;-)
I appreciate and thank you so very much for sharing and may God bless you and your family;-)
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
Comment from Rikki66
Boy was mama wrong. Martin is at least straight forward and truthful there are not many men that would come straight out with his request. Of course I did have have a friend that had the opening line of "Want to Fuck" he often got slapped more often he got laid.
RikkiLXXlll
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Boy was mama wrong. Martin is at least straight forward and truthful there are not many men that would come straight out with his request. Of course I did have have a friend that had the opening line of "Want to Fuck" he often got slapped more often he got laid.
RikkiLXXlll
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
Comment from Bobby Cunningham
This is very very entertaining and funny. The picture accompanying this is absolutely perfect and a deceptive set up, very clever and creative. This is by far the best one in this contest that we've read. Best of luck in the contest.
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This is very very entertaining and funny. The picture accompanying this is absolutely perfect and a deceptive set up, very clever and creative. This is by far the best one in this contest that we've read. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
Comment from Ogden
That phony SOB, Martin, did not gasp, nor did his contemptible heart throb! The rest of the story appears okay, and its message is clear.
Ogden (Don)
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That phony SOB, Martin, did not gasp, nor did his contemptible heart throb! The rest of the story appears okay, and its message is clear.
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
Comment from SixFtLion (Suzanna)
Ha ha, loved the ending!!! I was not expecting it. At first, it started so gentle, and romantic, and sensual. And then BOOM, the ending was spectacular. Good luck in the contest!
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Ha ha, loved the ending!!! I was not expecting it. At first, it started so gentle, and romantic, and sensual. And then BOOM, the ending was spectacular. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020