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Ghost Story contest entry
2 total reviews
Comment from
CandySoda777
This has potential to be a good story, except there's no story in it! Some parts are too sudden and needs some work. The ending is a bit rough and doesn't tie everything together nicely. I don't understand why this is a nightmare, or why he is seeing these things. I really don't like giving negative reviews. :( Give this story some work and it could be much better!
Comment Written 04-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2020
Comment from
humpwhistle
Well, that takes COVID to the extreme. Do ghosts actually eat at restaurants?
Best of luck with the voters.
Peace, Lee
the ghosts he thought that was having a good time.--'were', not 'was'.
he sees the ghosts appearing and are having fun.--maybe you don't need 'are' in this sentence.
They were playing on the beach.--you've changed tenses. 'Were' should be 'are' if you want to stay in present tense.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2020
Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
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