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Aiona's Poems

Viewing comments for Chapter 81 "Diana Moon Glampers"
Because my portfolio is too messy and I have OCD.

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Comment from lyenochka
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It is so sad that someone would be driven with by envy and entitlement instead of learning grace and humility. Lacking beauty or smarts cannot be helped but grace can be learned. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
    Thanks, Lyenochka.
Comment from Vanna1
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I don't understand the point, or maybe I'm too stupid too. However I believe should have a comma after but I am not an expert. Your presentation is nice, the masks represent ugly and pretty faces? I think... So we'll done there. Your writing is nicely worded.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
    LOL! Thank you for the compliment that it's nicely worded. Is it still, if I wasn't able to convey the point of the poem? :) I may work on it some more! Thanks for the review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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I think this story got lots of potential and teaches us a cruel lesson about the human vanity: "Realizing she could never be as smart, beautiful, and graceful as others, Diana resolved to always make sure others would be as dumb, ugly, and clumsy as she was." Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
    Thank you, Iza.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Wry humor--matriculated based on pity! That bit of wit earns your stars in itself. Great ending re envy killed her---too dense to appreciate the irony. Cheers. LIZ

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 20-Jul-2020
    Thanks, Liz.