Construction Basics 101
Seems some might need reminding...25 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt.
This short piece has a clear message and the picture is a good match.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt.
This short piece has a clear message and the picture is a good match.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Sharon. 8-)
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Mystery Writer. This is a very well written commentary on this day and age. Protesting against everything American is a way to make the ravine even wider.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Hello Mystery Writer. This is a very well written commentary on this day and age. Protesting against everything American is a way to make the ravine even wider.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Gosh, why don't folks get that, yeah....? Thank you, Z! 8-)
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They want to turn America into a landfill. It is intentional in my opinion.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Building a bridge - first you need to widen the ravine. I like the logic of this poem, it has a very good structure and you manage to keep the interest of the reader until the end. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Building a bridge - first you need to widen the ravine. I like the logic of this poem, it has a very good structure and you manage to keep the interest of the reader until the end. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Iza. 8-)
Comment from Melissa Russell Deur
This is an awesome message, perfect for this moment in history, and a great contest entry. The art is a wonderful illustration of what your poem says. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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This is an awesome message, perfect for this moment in history, and a great contest entry. The art is a wonderful illustration of what your poem says. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Melissa. 8-)
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The powerful words complement the dramatic illustration chosen. The whole is pulled together outstandingly as the words have hidden meanings, to give a poem that is much richer than we would expect from the 5-7-5 limitation.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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The powerful words complement the dramatic illustration chosen. The whole is pulled together outstandingly as the words have hidden meanings, to give a poem that is much richer than we would expect from the 5-7-5 limitation.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Lady Katherine, for your wonderful comments and those lovely, shining stars! Here's wishing you an awesome week!
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Amen! You are so entirely right! If people would just build those bridges rather than further dividing. Your 5-7-5 hits the nail on the head. Best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Amen! You are so entirely right! If people would just build those bridges rather than further dividing. Your 5-7-5 hits the nail on the head. Best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Rhonda. 8-)
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
How true these words are! This is a great and powerful entry for the 3-5-3 writing prompt. I hope this poem does well in the contest. Great good luck to you!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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How true these words are! This is a great and powerful entry for the 3-5-3 writing prompt. I hope this poem does well in the contest. Great good luck to you!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Rebecca, but this is a 5-7-5 contest...?? Take care!
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I must have been thinking of the 3-5-3. Sorry.
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No worries! Have a great week over there!! 8-)
Comment from roof35
I think this has political undertones and they are too often ignored in today's world. This says a lot in a few words. It is very nicely done. The illustration pairs well.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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I think this has political undertones and they are too often ignored in today's world. This says a lot in a few words. It is very nicely done. The illustration pairs well.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thank you, roof! 8-)
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer/Bridge-Builder,
What a smart post! Though it's difficult to actually see what's going on in your image, I can pretend to see someone trying to construct a bridge amidst all that mayhem.
And isn't that exactly what's going on in our lives right now? And it's so sad and frustrating and disheartening to watch.
This poem not only has the correct number of syllables, it feels natural and conversational and WISE. It should be multiplied by a million and printed on those motivational posters and hung in every school hall in the world. Then in every office. Every bathroom. Etc.
It's a great message. Um... I like it - do you get that drift? *smile*
I hope you do well in the contest - so far, you have my vote!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Dear Mystery Writer/Bridge-Builder,
What a smart post! Though it's difficult to actually see what's going on in your image, I can pretend to see someone trying to construct a bridge amidst all that mayhem.
And isn't that exactly what's going on in our lives right now? And it's so sad and frustrating and disheartening to watch.
This poem not only has the correct number of syllables, it feels natural and conversational and WISE. It should be multiplied by a million and printed on those motivational posters and hung in every school hall in the world. Then in every office. Every bathroom. Etc.
It's a great message. Um... I like it - do you get that drift? *smile*
I hope you do well in the contest - so far, you have my vote!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Lol! You are awesome, Robyn - thanx so very much for the stars! 8-)
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Very clever words. The right way to proceed indeed. The bridge can only be built when the valley is securely contained. What does this remind you of? It reminds me of Politics.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Very clever words. The right way to proceed indeed. The bridge can only be built when the valley is securely contained. What does this remind you of? It reminds me of Politics.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Ralf! 8-)
