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Heart Cafted Poems - 2020

Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Run or Walk"
Musings of an old man -2020

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Comment from duchessofdrumborg
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'Run..Walk", is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece.
It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work. Good luck with the contest! My fingers are crossed for you.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
    So thank for those crossed fingers!
reply by duchessofdrumborg on 25-Jan-2021

    The crossed fingers are always welcome. :)))
Comment from Julie Sandy
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Very interesting poem, I like the formation of syllables, it seems like a very challenging write.
Great shape also

Thank you for sharing
Good luck in the competition

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2021
    Thank you!
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
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What a great entry for this contest! You have very eloquently created a picture in the reader's mind and a story with a moral - it's ok to be slow, just keep going.
Thank you for sharing.
Susan

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
    Susan, thank you!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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This is a well-executed tetractys that rings so true. At least for me! On several occasions I have performed spectacular nosedives when I stop concentrating on the mechanics of actually walking and let my mind wander where it will whilst I continue to move. I never seem to learn my lesson.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
    Katherine, oh yes! Boy have I taking some tumbles and stumbles, Now, a this age, I worry a bit far more of the possible end result. Smiling with you...
reply by Katherine M. (k-11) on 24-Jan-2021
    My last nosedive was at the end of September (I wrote a short story about it (end of the fall) but if I remember rightly it still needs some work). I had to spend a full day in the Emergency ward of the hospital - very uncomfortable.
    See you Tuesday?
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
    Yes, this is my intention! 🙏
reply by Katherine M. (k-11) on 24-Jan-2021
    great
Comment from Pantygynt
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OMG puzzling out the rules for this one is worse than attempting the Times crossword puzzle.

Then I realised you had achieved a political poetic cartoon.

First up, our esteemed prime minister, Boris Johnson:
'wobble, stumble, tumble, go down...so fast'.

And second the leader of the Welsh Senedd, Mark Drakeford:
'simply slithering, dithering along'.

Hang on! What about the other devolved regions?

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
    ha!ha! That?s funny, thanks
Comment from AnnieDawn
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This is a new style that I have not seen before and I really like the form. You have created a nice poem that makes sense and I think it may be difficult to do that with this form. Great job. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2021


reply by the author on 24-Jan-2021
    Thank you Annie.
Comment from BeasPeas
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Great job on this amazing poem, Jim. Good shape to the lines with nice word choices. Illustrated well with a positive message. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
    Matilyn, what a fun poetic challenge, have a great week.
Comment from Patty Palmer
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A cute thought of the snail going at a snail's pace and the amount of time it takes him/her to get from one place to another. Of course, if he/she ran, she may not get there much faster. Better to stay slow,
Patty

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
    Patty, thank you!
Comment from June Sargent
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What a charming entry for the contest! Although we often joke about things going at a snail's pace, in today's uncertain world- we would do well to take our time and do it right...love the artwork!

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
    June, thank you do much! Have an enjoyable and safe 4th.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written Quad Tetractys making up twenty lines for the contest and the subject about the snail that has all the time in the world to get to his chosen destination and no need to run.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2020


reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
    Thank you!