You and I
An incredible but doomed affair16 total reviews
Comment from Edward Escobar
I may still young in the field of poetry and so I often find my heart giving all the reviews and I was moved by astronaut wobbling in space, solo souls, you arch towards me. For me it was a unity of words that was composed with a deep love.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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I may still young in the field of poetry and so I often find my heart giving all the reviews and I was moved by astronaut wobbling in space, solo souls, you arch towards me. For me it was a unity of words that was composed with a deep love.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thank you VERY much, Edward, for youur excellent review.
Comment from Saria/Shreyamsi
A very unique way to write on love..... very different from any other love poetry...Really liked the ending though...All I would say it is "really whimsical"....Thanks for sharing!!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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A very unique way to write on love..... very different from any other love poetry...Really liked the ending though...All I would say it is "really whimsical"....Thanks for sharing!!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thank youu so much for this beautiful review!
Comment from January L'Angelle
This is a dream? You need to stop eating pizza before you go to bed at night, it's giving you weird dreams! LOL. If this is love, and you are plunged into the fire right along with your love, that's a nightmare. (Ok, it's kind of romantic) I like the poem a lot. It's whimsical and different that any other. Well done! -January L. :)
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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This is a dream? You need to stop eating pizza before you go to bed at night, it's giving you weird dreams! LOL. If this is love, and you are plunged into the fire right along with your love, that's a nightmare. (Ok, it's kind of romantic) I like the poem a lot. It's whimsical and different that any other. Well done! -January L. :)
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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January, thanks for this review. I tried to write this poem as abstract as I could, but building the tension and electricity in it. Your reaction is as I hoped for.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Sounds so sizzling. You wrote it well. What you cannot stop is loving someone. You can stop seeing them or communicating, but you can't stop loving them. You are helpless. Enjoy!
Ralf
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2020
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Sounds so sizzling. You wrote it well. What you cannot stop is loving someone. You can stop seeing them or communicating, but you can't stop loving them. You are helpless. Enjoy!
Ralf
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for reviewing, Ralf. It means much to me.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Some relationships are toxic and often draw two people in with intrigue and mystery as both parties like touching the flame and often get their fingers burnt as it becomes an addiction with no release, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Some relationships are toxic and often draw two people in with intrigue and mystery as both parties like touching the flame and often get their fingers burnt as it becomes an addiction with no release, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Dolly, thank you so much for your good review!
Comment from Margaret Bednar
It might be wisdom, it might be fear. Sometimes life feels this way, as long as it isn't dangerous, it might be worth the chance. Otherwise, the comparison to the wobbling, burning asteroid might take a bit to recover from. The last line of each stanza makes it clear what you are talking about.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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It might be wisdom, it might be fear. Sometimes life feels this way, as long as it isn't dangerous, it might be worth the chance. Otherwise, the comparison to the wobbling, burning asteroid might take a bit to recover from. The last line of each stanza makes it clear what you are talking about.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Thanks, Margaret, for the review.
Comment from estory
This is a really unique, original image in my opinion. It's kind of violent and all encompassing, cataclysmic, but it capture that sense of doomed or fated future. These two bodies are on a collision course and nothing can stop it. It's like a force of nature. A force majeure. estory
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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This is a really unique, original image in my opinion. It's kind of violent and all encompassing, cataclysmic, but it capture that sense of doomed or fated future. These two bodies are on a collision course and nothing can stop it. It's like a force of nature. A force majeure. estory
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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thank you so much for your excellent review!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about a love life you desire but it seems it may end up in a disastrous collusion that cannot be prevented on the course it is on now. Sometimes it is hard to make the right decision.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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A very well-written poem about a love life you desire but it seems it may end up in a disastrous collusion that cannot be prevented on the course it is on now. Sometimes it is hard to make the right decision.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Sandra, thanks for this review. Hard indeed!
Comment from Cindy Decker
Marjon, I love your poems' unique takes on love. This poem is wonderfully crafted using just a few words and the metaphorical use of asteroids.
I love it!
Blessings and best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Marjon, I love your poems' unique takes on love. This poem is wonderfully crafted using just a few words and the metaphorical use of asteroids.
I love it!
Blessings and best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Thanks a lot for the review, Cindy. Gives me hope that it isn't so bad after all. I was afraid it was too nihilistic to be understood.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
I'm not quite sure I understood your poem and your meaning behind it, if not forgive me;-( please!
It could've flowed a lot better and in my opinion, it needed a "once more go over" before publishing.
Thank you so much for sharing;-)
God bless you;-)
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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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I'm not quite sure I understood your poem and your meaning behind it, if not forgive me;-( please!
It could've flowed a lot better and in my opinion, it needed a "once more go over" before publishing.
Thank you so much for sharing;-)
God bless you;-)
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Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Melody, Thanks for commenting. I'll go over it again. I was already afraid it would not be understood.
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It's okay, you are very talented so please don't ever give up or think you can't do it because you can;-)
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I am still pondering about it. Many other reviewers praised it highly and said they understood. But maybe it is too nihilistic? Needs more worked-out?
