Flashback to the Sixties
A 30 Syllable entry5 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This thirty-syllable poem, Flashback to the Sixties, has the proper syllable count and notes the occasion when the government has totally lost the faith of both the present voter and the future ones.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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This thirty-syllable poem, Flashback to the Sixties, has the proper syllable count and notes the occasion when the government has totally lost the faith of both the present voter and the future ones.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020
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Thank you for reading and sharing your insights.
Comment from artisart4u
Yes, demonstrations went on then as they are taking place now.
Maybe someone will figure out why it takes street action to make a change and make the change before that happens.
You have the right amount of syllables and good luck with your poem.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2020
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Yes, demonstrations went on then as they are taking place now.
Maybe someone will figure out why it takes street action to make a change and make the change before that happens.
You have the right amount of syllables and good luck with your poem.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2020
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Thank you for sharing your insights.
Comment from BeasPeas
This is very well done. Change is inevitable, but tearing down our country is a terrible thing. Anarchy is no way to settle anything. Your piece is described and illustrated perfectly. Marilyn
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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This is very well done. Change is inevitable, but tearing down our country is a terrible thing. Anarchy is no way to settle anything. Your piece is described and illustrated perfectly. Marilyn
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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I agree. There is a way to make changes that does not involve violence. We need to be reasonable. Thank yu for dropping by to share your insights.
Comment from QC Poet
The sixties were 60 years ago, rate of change is worst than a snails pace. Thanks for Sharing, looks Great message may stand out a bit more with punctuation.
I'd place an exclamation point (!) after - before!, A (?) after muffled? and Now?, caps on Echoes of the Past! some dramatic flare to match this excellent message entry. Good Luck in the contest and may God Bless you.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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The sixties were 60 years ago, rate of change is worst than a snails pace. Thanks for Sharing, looks Great message may stand out a bit more with punctuation.
I'd place an exclamation point (!) after - before!, A (?) after muffled? and Now?, caps on Echoes of the Past! some dramatic flare to match this excellent message entry. Good Luck in the contest and may God Bless you.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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I appreciate very much your insightful comments and suggestions. I have revised it. Not sure if it will go well in the contest, but I have to write what I feel.
Comment from Cindy Decker
I am not sure if this is pertinent, but some of my relationships have been like this: things go sour, then we part, miss each other, reunite, things go sour again. I was caught up in this rut for two years a long time ago. I wish I had made a clean break and looked for the fireworks.
Anyway, that's what I got out of your poem. About comfortable foolish choices. It brought back memories. That's what poetry is supposed to do.
Excellent photo and poem.
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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I am not sure if this is pertinent, but some of my relationships have been like this: things go sour, then we part, miss each other, reunite, things go sour again. I was caught up in this rut for two years a long time ago. I wish I had made a clean break and looked for the fireworks.
Anyway, that's what I got out of your poem. About comfortable foolish choices. It brought back memories. That's what poetry is supposed to do.
Excellent photo and poem.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Thank you fur sharing your insights- words conjure memories which are different for each one of us.
