Pappa's Memories and Ramblings
Viewing comments for Chapter 83 "Empty "Poems, Rants, Short Stories and Ramblings
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
I like the animation of emptiness. That creates a different image and mood than some other submissions. You have some strong metaphors. Some do not care for capitalizations but I see a need for them as do you. Well written.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2020
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I like the animation of emptiness. That creates a different image and mood than some other submissions. You have some strong metaphors. Some do not care for capitalizations but I see a need for them as do you. Well written.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2020
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Thank you for the Time to Read, Rate and Review, I Appreciate your Valued Support.
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ThanK You VerY MuCh
Comment from country ranch writer
I a, sure the ole place was full of class back in it's day of parting and I Growingup no ball for this or that occasion. A palace once in its day maye?
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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I a, sure the ole place was full of class back in it's day of parting and I Growingup no ball for this or that occasion. A palace once in its day maye?
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Thank you for the Review and Rating on this Pix This Challenge Photo Submission. Blessings to you for Your Continued Support.
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Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Interesting poem, especially seen against you background, as I read it in your bio. Also, I read in your postscript that it is in part autobiographical. Quite impressive! Significant line: That empty darkness is to be left behind for the new beginnings it installs.Good! Accepting the life and condition you have now, helps to find happiness and worthiness of living.
Very well written, but I have a comment:
I feel puzzled and a bit confused about all the uppercase you used in the middle of sentences, where they are not needed at all!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Interesting poem, especially seen against you background, as I read it in your bio. Also, I read in your postscript that it is in part autobiographical. Quite impressive! Significant line: That empty darkness is to be left behind for the new beginnings it installs.Good! Accepting the life and condition you have now, helps to find happiness and worthiness of living.
Very well written, but I have a comment:
I feel puzzled and a bit confused about all the uppercase you used in the middle of sentences, where they are not needed at all!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Thank you for the Review and Compliments. The caps come from and old habit of emphasizing words that I have used within my Poetry to create a second similar poem within my Poetry.
I'm working on correcting that old habit. Thanks again.
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Very welcome.
Comment from roof35
This poem is well-written and well rhymed. The illustration pairs perfectly with your words. One can almost picture some of the events that once took place in this old building. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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This poem is well-written and well rhymed. The illustration pairs perfectly with your words. One can almost picture some of the events that once took place in this old building. Nicely done.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Thank you for Your Support and Encouraging Comments. Blessings to you and your family.