Grandpa's Watch
Life lessons for a wise man.43 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
There several noted literary techniques in this poem. Very few use similes because they often come off as cliche' or schmaltzy. The simile you use give a richness to your poem and is the crux of the poem. I like your regional, cultural dialect and concepts. There are several metaphors too. You have good strong allusions. I also enjoy your wordplay. This is very nice.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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There several noted literary techniques in this poem. Very few use similes because they often come off as cliche' or schmaltzy. The simile you use give a richness to your poem and is the crux of the poem. I like your regional, cultural dialect and concepts. There are several metaphors too. You have good strong allusions. I also enjoy your wordplay. This is very nice.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2020
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Liz, thank you for a very good review!
Comment from Ogden
Well, I guess some day, you, too, will hand one of your grandchildren a box, probably not wrapped in newspaper (newspapers likely to become extinct before then), and when opened, he or she would have said, "What's this, Grandpa," if you hadn't read this review.
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Well, I guess some day, you, too, will hand one of your grandchildren a box, probably not wrapped in newspaper (newspapers likely to become extinct before then), and when opened, he or she would have said, "What's this, Grandpa," if you hadn't read this review.
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Don thanks much!
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You're very welcome!
Don
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, and no wonder it won the contest on the day. Congratulations! It's beautifully written and so very atmospheric. I liked your free poem a lot. Yes, history is a wondrous thing and no better than heirlooms to tell the story. All best.Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Hi there, and no wonder it won the contest on the day. Congratulations! It's beautifully written and so very atmospheric. I liked your free poem a lot. Yes, history is a wondrous thing and no better than heirlooms to tell the story. All best.Ulla:)))
Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Ulla, thank you
Comment from Joan E.
Congratulations on winning the Free Verse Contest with this tribute to your grandfather. I relished the "watch" as a symbol of the lessons he taught and you continue to pass on to your grandchildren. Big cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Congratulations on winning the Free Verse Contest with this tribute to your grandfather. I relished the "watch" as a symbol of the lessons he taught and you continue to pass on to your grandchildren. Big cheers- Joan
Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Joan, wow! Thank you for you strong validation on this free verse poem.
Comment from Louise Michelle
What a wise man! I'm wondering if it's written about your own grandfather or maybe it's you, reflecting on life. It doesn't really matter. This is a splendid poem and just begs to be read aloud. Nice work. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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What a wise man! I'm wondering if it's written about your own grandfather or maybe it's you, reflecting on life. It doesn't really matter. This is a splendid poem and just begs to be read aloud. Nice work. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Lou, thank you! It is non-fiction free verse, my grandpa and now my grandchildren
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A lovely free verse JLR about your Grandpa's pocket watch and the special time that a little boy spent with his Grandfather and now you are the Grandpa sitting with your grandchildren. Lovely sentiments conveyed here, congrats on the contest win.
cheers
valda
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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A lovely free verse JLR about your Grandpa's pocket watch and the special time that a little boy spent with his Grandfather and now you are the Grandpa sitting with your grandchildren. Lovely sentiments conveyed here, congrats on the contest win.
cheers
valda
Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Valda, I am so very grateful for the is six-star validation. Thank you
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I think you have a a winner, the nostalgia of this poem and the purity of the childhood memories; ""Life, it is like this watch,"
"I have to do my part to have the hands
go round and round."
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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I think you have a a winner, the nostalgia of this poem and the purity of the childhood memories; ""Life, it is like this watch,"
"I have to do my part to have the hands
go round and round."
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Iza, thank you!
Comment from Earl Corp
I'm not a free verse poetry fan but I liked yours. Using the watch as the prized possession won me over. Your poem made sense and made me remember my own grandpa. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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I'm not a free verse poetry fan but I liked yours. Using the watch as the prized possession won me over. Your poem made sense and made me remember my own grandpa. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Thanks Earl!
Comment from joycetreasures
Hello,
I pray you are doing well this day. I like your poem about the history behind your grandpa's watch. I'm sure your learned much wisdom and lessons from your grandpa's stories about life. I like the way you received the watch at your graduation. I love that now you can share this beautiful story of your grandpa's watch with your grandchildren. How lovely? This was a very enjoyable read. I loved the photo you used also. Nicely done. Happy writing:-)
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Hello,
I pray you are doing well this day. I like your poem about the history behind your grandpa's watch. I'm sure your learned much wisdom and lessons from your grandpa's stories about life. I like the way you received the watch at your graduation. I love that now you can share this beautiful story of your grandpa's watch with your grandchildren. How lovely? This was a very enjoyable read. I loved the photo you used also. Nicely done. Happy writing:-)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Joyce, I am so pleased you enjoyed this non-fiction free verse poem, be blessed always!
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I did enjoy the poem Grandpa's Watch!
Comment from Mia Twysted
This is a lovely story written in poem format. It is great that your grandfather shared so much with you and that you can take that and share it with your own grandchildren.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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This is a lovely story written in poem format. It is great that your grandfather shared so much with you and that you can take that and share it with your own grandchildren.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much,
