Whoever would have guessed!
The most charming man you'll ever meet8 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
That was a scary experience, and you must have shocked to learn about his record. After all, you had trusted him enough that you trusted him to drive you home and to have dinner with him. Great ending. Understandable that you didn't want to piss him off. Well structured. judi
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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That was a scary experience, and you must have shocked to learn about his record. After all, you had trusted him enough that you trusted him to drive you home and to have dinner with him. Great ending. Understandable that you didn't want to piss him off. Well structured. judi
Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Chilling indeed! Thanks for stopping by, Judi.
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Margaret Bednar
This resonates with me. A dear man everyone in our small town loved and respected ... a pedophile! I've never really recovered from it. I believe he's still in jail. I wonder though now with Covid19. You use the would "gallantly" which fools the reader at first. And the creepiness of having to be careful at the end. It's unsettling.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
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This resonates with me. A dear man everyone in our small town loved and respected ... a pedophile! I've never really recovered from it. I believe he's still in jail. I wonder though now with Covid19. You use the would "gallantly" which fools the reader at first. And the creepiness of having to be careful at the end. It's unsettling.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
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Thanks Margaret--creepy and unsettling indeed. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Spitfire
You never know! Behind a man's gentlemanly gesture is a brute. I would accept the drink too. It sounds as if he had you in mind for an affair.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
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You never know! Behind a man's gentlemanly gesture is a brute. I would accept the drink too. It sounds as if he had you in mind for an affair.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
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Thanks Shari--I don't think he had an ulterior motive--just being his usual nice self. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Wise move Elizabeth. I can see the irony present and the wariness you would experience with him. Can you tell me, whose face was encased in plaster. You say "She thrust her hand at my face, it was encased in plaster" This is confusing to me. Good story though, just need clarification.
Ralf
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
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Wise move Elizabeth. I can see the irony present and the wariness you would experience with him. Can you tell me, whose face was encased in plaster. You say "She thrust her hand at my face, it was encased in plaster" This is confusing to me. Good story though, just need clarification.
Ralf
Comment Written 20-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
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Thanks for stopping by. I changed the line that confused you; it now reads: She thrust forth her right hand, which was encased in a plaster cast. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from BethShelby
Well , I guess he isn't all bad is if he cares enough to give you water. It just proves you really don't know what evil lurks in the heart of a man. I would hate to get my arm broken for not accepting the water but it sounds like he taste in rape victims runs to the younger side.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
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Well , I guess he isn't all bad is if he cares enough to give you water. It just proves you really don't know what evil lurks in the heart of a man. I would hate to get my arm broken for not accepting the water but it sounds like he taste in rape victims runs to the younger side.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
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Thanks Beth--As far as his taste in victims goes--he is admirably non-discriminatory--age is unimportant (not sure re gender preference) Still, I don't think he had an ulterior motive to give me water--just being his usual nice self. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Ha ha. What a story! It sounds so real I believed it up to the end. I would have accepted the water too. Who in their right mind would want to get on Joe's wrong side?
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
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Ha ha. What a story! It sounds so real I believed it up to the end. I would have accepted the water too. Who in their right mind would want to get on Joe's wrong side?
Comment Written 20-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
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Indeed. I gave the water to Chuck--he survived, so it wasn't poisoned after all. Cheers. LIZ
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Ha ha
Comment from Sandra Lovett
Wow. You never really know who someone is or what kind of past they have. It truly is a scary situation for many people. A lot of women are abused in many ways. You've brought that out in your writing. Well done.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2020
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Wow. You never really know who someone is or what kind of past they have. It truly is a scary situation for many people. A lot of women are abused in many ways. You've brought that out in your writing. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2020
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Thanks for stopping by Sandra--I note that you are a brand new member--welcome to Storyland! Glad you appreciated this piece. Cheers. LIZ
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Thank you Liz
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a great Liz, and would've worked well in a short story contest. Such good lead in to what seemed to be a fine fellow turned out to be someone completely the opposite of what he seemed he might be maybe.
I think you made the right choice in just taking the water and then what?
Gloria
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2020
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This is a great Liz, and would've worked well in a short story contest. Such good lead in to what seemed to be a fine fellow turned out to be someone completely the opposite of what he seemed he might be maybe.
I think you made the right choice in just taking the water and then what?
Gloria
Comment Written 19-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2020
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Thanks Gloria--well, I haven't drunk the water--the cap appears intact so I don't think it's poisoned--but just in case...Cheers. LIZ