Sunrise
A Naani contest offering22 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Congratulations, YM, on your first place win. I knew you would win! Your poem is beautiful. The picture is striking and so perfect for your excellent word choices. I love the rhyme. Your few syllables, as required, are descriptive, filled with imagery, and smooth flowing to be this style of writing. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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Congratulations, YM, on your first place win. I knew you would win! Your poem is beautiful. The picture is striking and so perfect for your excellent word choices. I love the rhyme. Your few syllables, as required, are descriptive, filled with imagery, and smooth flowing to be this style of writing. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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Thanx for your lovely comments and for stopping by on this one, Jan! Much appreciated, my lady! Yvette
Comment from mermaids
There is a light feeling to your words. "Beckon earth to light" is a fitting last line that sums up the first three lines. You also paint a picture of a sun
rise and the feelings that arise when observing one.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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There is a light feeling to your words. "Beckon earth to light" is a fitting last line that sums up the first three lines. You also paint a picture of a sun
rise and the feelings that arise when observing one.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
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Thank you for your lovely comments! ;) Yvette
Comment from Ronni
Hi dear Yvette,
This enchanting presentation comes off like a casting call from
a Director in the far off distance, "Lights, Camera, Action!'
and indeed you provide it all ever so commandingly and evocatively
in each phrase evolving into and completing the perfectly desired
scene! Set Up: from the distant hill, time frame from morn to night,
sun's warm rays breathes in Earth's daily light, awesome write dear!
You express so much so stoundingly in set up takes and images.
Enjoyed this indeed, your fascinating creativity is never off duty!
Thanks for sharing this one dear....(:) (;)
Love blessings, Ronni
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Hi dear Yvette,
This enchanting presentation comes off like a casting call from
a Director in the far off distance, "Lights, Camera, Action!'
and indeed you provide it all ever so commandingly and evocatively
in each phrase evolving into and completing the perfectly desired
scene! Set Up: from the distant hill, time frame from morn to night,
sun's warm rays breathes in Earth's daily light, awesome write dear!
You express so much so stoundingly in set up takes and images.
Enjoyed this indeed, your fascinating creativity is never off duty!
Thanks for sharing this one dear....(:) (;)
Love blessings, Ronni
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Oh, I do love your enthusiasm this morning, my lady -- I'm trying to grab hold of it!! ;) Thanx so much for your review and, as always, thanx for the wonderful smile you always send along with your comments! ;) Take care out West! ;) Yvette
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Your Naani poem is a lovely way to announce the beginning of a new day Yvette with well used W and R alliteration. Congrats on the win, cheers valda
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Your Naani poem is a lovely way to announce the beginning of a new day Yvette with well used W and R alliteration. Congrats on the win, cheers valda
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Pearl -- thanx so much for stopping by on this 'shortie'! ;) Yvette
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your naani is excellent in every respect--skillfully nd creatively composed, vividly descriptive, and praiseful of nature. Excellent use of personification and good artwork
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Your naani is excellent in every respect--skillfully nd creatively composed, vividly descriptive, and praiseful of nature. Excellent use of personification and good artwork
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Janice -- thanx so much for stopping by on this 'shortie'! ;) Yvette
Comment from Mia Twysted
You provide a picture image in the reader's mind. Both with the picture you picked and with the words you used. It feels like friends greeting each other as night and day switch sides.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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You provide a picture image in the reader's mind. Both with the picture you picked and with the words you used. It feels like friends greeting each other as night and day switch sides.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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Many thanks for your review, Mia!
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are uplifting, descriptive, and creative. I pondered
on the theme of this poem. For me, the morning light brings hope.
I like the color scheme you chose and the artwork. They compliment
this poem well. Hope you are having a great day!
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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The author's words are uplifting, descriptive, and creative. I pondered
on the theme of this poem. For me, the morning light brings hope.
I like the color scheme you chose and the artwork. They compliment
this poem well. Hope you are having a great day!
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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Many thanks for your wonderful comments, Harmony!
Comment from Alchera
A perfect written naani poem throughout its structural counting syllables and four line unique stanza. Beautifully described within its thematic rudder transfer of breaking dawn of a new day. Great work! Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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A perfect written naani poem throughout its structural counting syllables and four line unique stanza. Beautifully described within its thematic rudder transfer of breaking dawn of a new day. Great work! Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Well, Tony, you have certainly made the day a bit 'shinier' over here - thank you for such an awesome review and for those stars!! :) Hope this finds you well over there -- have a Wonderful Wednesday! ;) Yvette
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is such a bright sunlight it hurts your eyes, perhaps even to the extent of causing damage. But even just on a piece of paper you can feel the heat soaking through. What a joyful awakening.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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This is such a bright sunlight it hurts your eyes, perhaps even to the extent of causing damage. But even just on a piece of paper you can feel the heat soaking through. What a joyful awakening.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Lady Kat -- thanx so much for stopping by on this 'shortie'! ;) Yvette
Comment from sherrygreywolf
Correct syllable count, some rhyming and a bit of alliteration make this a contender for a top position in the Naani contest. Also loved the artwork you chose to further illustrate your word picture.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Correct syllable count, some rhyming and a bit of alliteration make this a contender for a top position in the Naani contest. Also loved the artwork you chose to further illustrate your word picture.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Thank you, Sherry, for your review!
