Evening Storm
A thunderstorm on the mountain15 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are interesting, clear and creative. I found the
rhyming in this poem was excellent. I really thought about the
3rd stanza and how the author gently conveyed a safe place.
The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
Hope you are having a great day!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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The author's words are interesting, clear and creative. I found the
rhyming in this poem was excellent. I really thought about the
3rd stanza and how the author gently conveyed a safe place.
The artwork is perfect and compliments this poem.
Hope you are having a great day!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my piece. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Hope your week is going well.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your skillfully-written minute poem vividly describes the storm from the preliminaries to the rainbow, including the eagle, which instinctively
knows what to do. Good rhymes
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Your skillfully-written minute poem vividly describes the storm from the preliminaries to the rainbow, including the eagle, which instinctively
knows what to do. Good rhymes
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thank you, Janice, for taking the time to read and review my poem. Hope your week is going well.
Comment from Margaret Bednar
This is gorgeous - the last line, though, seems a bit forced but that is the nature of a form sometimes. I think Eagles (or mighty hawks) really do parallel well ith a wintry sky and storming mountain peaks. Nice symplism and word choices.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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This is gorgeous - the last line, though, seems a bit forced but that is the nature of a form sometimes. I think Eagles (or mighty hawks) really do parallel well ith a wintry sky and storming mountain peaks. Nice symplism and word choices.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thank you, Margaret, for taking the time to read and review my poem. Poetry is not, for me, an easy format. Though when I've been writing a lot of it, my husband laughs when I begin to speak in rhymes, the strictly regimented syllable counts make my a lunatic at time. And that often causes my lines to be forced - lol. Oh well, it is what it is. Hope your week is going well.
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Hello there, my friend. This is such a lovely minute poem, I always enjoy a good storm. lol. I love the entire presentation, perfect photo, font, and color. Good luck! ~Kerry
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Hello there, my friend. This is such a lovely minute poem, I always enjoy a good storm. lol. I love the entire presentation, perfect photo, font, and color. Good luck! ~Kerry
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thank you, Kerry, for taking the time to read and review my poem. I, too, love thunderstorms. I hope your week is treating you well.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Evening Storm
by sherrygreywolf
Hello, Sherry,
Beautiful imagery and presentation. A wonderful entry for the Minute contest. The nature scene is so peaceful...true beauty.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Evening Storm
by sherrygreywolf
Hello, Sherry,
Beautiful imagery and presentation. A wonderful entry for the Minute contest. The nature scene is so peaceful...true beauty.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it. Hope your week is going well.
Comment from June Sargent
A lovely minute poem that captures the essence of a stormy night. Nature has a way of cleansing the earth - and then the calm sets in afterwards. Meanwhile, the birds and other creatures know exactly where to shelter safely. We can learn from them...
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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A lovely minute poem that captures the essence of a stormy night. Nature has a way of cleansing the earth - and then the calm sets in afterwards. Meanwhile, the birds and other creatures know exactly where to shelter safely. We can learn from them...
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thank you, June, for reading and commenting on my poem. Hope you are doing well this week.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written minute poem about the storm starts forming in the mountains, we see the birds fly above finding shelter from the coming storm and the dangers it may bring.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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A very well-written minute poem about the storm starts forming in the mountains, we see the birds fly above finding shelter from the coming storm and the dangers it may bring.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thank you, Sandra, for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. Hope you are doing well this week.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed the sentiments here of the stormy skies threatening rain. The meter is spasmodic which interrupts the flow a little, but you brought the essence of the storm here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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I enjoyed the sentiments here of the stormy skies threatening rain. The meter is spasmodic which interrupts the flow a little, but you brought the essence of the storm here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2020
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. It was fun writing it.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Overall I appreciate the thought of the poem and I could vision where you wanted to go with it, however, it didn't quite make it there! Don't give up though ...
Here are a few suggestions:
*Change("Safe in God's palm
waiting the calm")
*Suggested change: "waiting the calm" should be "awaiting the calm"
*Another suggestion is:
*Change ("Lightning zigzags through waning storm")
*Suggested changes: "through waning storms" or "through the waning storm"!
Change: ("Rain slowing down
then rainbow crown")
* Suggested change: "then rainbow crowns" or "then the rainbow crowns"
The font is a little difficult to make out as well.
Just a small amount of tweaking needed to finish it up;-) Overall great thought and on the right track.
Thank you so much for sharing and God bless you;-)
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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Overall I appreciate the thought of the poem and I could vision where you wanted to go with it, however, it didn't quite make it there! Don't give up though ...
Here are a few suggestions:
*Change("Safe in God's palm
waiting the calm")
*Suggested change: "waiting the calm" should be "awaiting the calm"
*Another suggestion is:
*Change ("Lightning zigzags through waning storm")
*Suggested changes: "through waning storms" or "through the waning storm"!
Change: ("Rain slowing down
then rainbow crown")
* Suggested change: "then rainbow crowns" or "then the rainbow crowns"
The font is a little difficult to make out as well.
Just a small amount of tweaking needed to finish it up;-) Overall great thought and on the right track.
Thank you so much for sharing and God bless you;-)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Thank you for taking the time to read my work, Melodie. Unfortunately, what may sound better to the ear does not always meet the criteria for the contest - lol! So some of the work has to stay as it is. And I'll take another look at the font. Again - thank you.
Comment from roof35
I really like the illustration. Of course, it pairs perfectly with your words. You followed all the rules and did it expertly. This is very well written. I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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I really like the illustration. Of course, it pairs perfectly with your words. You followed all the rules and did it expertly. This is very well written. I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Thank you for taking the time to read and critique my work. Glad you enjoyed it.
