Lady Killer
100 word flash8 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, anonymous,
Interesting entry for the
100 Word Dash writing prompt contest. You incorporated the first kiss into your flash fiction. Good job with the word count. It's hard to write flash fiction. You did well. Good luck in the contest.
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Hello, anonymous,
Interesting entry for the
100 Word Dash writing prompt contest. You incorporated the first kiss into your flash fiction. Good job with the word count. It's hard to write flash fiction. You did well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2020
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a good strong entry for the 100 Word Dash writing prompt. It should do very well in the contest. I wish you the very best of luck.
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This is a good strong entry for the 100 Word Dash writing prompt. It should do very well in the contest. I wish you the very best of luck.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2020
Comment from Iza Deleanu
This story is quite an unexpected turn, the killing is not for real, is just the magnet that attracts you to the story. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
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This story is quite an unexpected turn, the killing is not for real, is just the magnet that attracts you to the story. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2020
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I really liked this piece. It starts off in one direction and then sharp-turns away to another.
Fast-paced and has a disturbing whiff of reality and believability about it.
Great stuff.
Best of luck in the competition
GMG
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Hi there,
I really liked this piece. It starts off in one direction and then sharp-turns away to another.
Fast-paced and has a disturbing whiff of reality and believability about it.
Great stuff.
Best of luck in the competition
GMG
Comment Written 17-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from January L'Angelle
This is very naughty! Forget the lady killer stuff. The Bundy, Dahmer, Lector etc. That's fodder for the real juicy story here. The lady wins! I like that she took advantage of the situation and in essence saved her own life without knowing it. Brilliant! Well told story! -January L.
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This is very naughty! Forget the lady killer stuff. The Bundy, Dahmer, Lector etc. That's fodder for the real juicy story here. The lady wins! I like that she took advantage of the situation and in essence saved her own life without knowing it. Brilliant! Well told story! -January L.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word, flash fiction story, Lady Killer, has the required word count and gives the term QUICKIE and SLAM BAM a qualified example. Kooky!
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This one-hundred-word, flash fiction story, Lady Killer, has the required word count and gives the term QUICKIE and SLAM BAM a qualified example. Kooky!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
Comment from Melodie Michelle
It was well written but you lost me here:
("Later, I awoke scared, sticky, and ashamed.
She opened the door. "You were killing it. I posted our video. We're famous."
Well, I wanted to be a lady killer. Next time, condoms; women are dangerous").
What do condoms have to do with killing someone and who did he kill;-)?
Thanxxx for sharing and many blessings to you;-)
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It was well written but you lost me here:
("Later, I awoke scared, sticky, and ashamed.
She opened the door. "You were killing it. I posted our video. We're famous."
Well, I wanted to be a lady killer. Next time, condoms; women are dangerous").
What do condoms have to do with killing someone and who did he kill;-)?
Thanxxx for sharing and many blessings to you;-)
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
Comment from Jacob David Collins
I thought this was an interesting take on the idea for the contest. I thought your writing was well written and and your character came through very strongly. I also thought the twist was good at the end. Good luck in the contest!
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I thought this was an interesting take on the idea for the contest. I thought your writing was well written and and your character came through very strongly. I also thought the twist was good at the end. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020