A Twist Of Fate
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Comment from Carolyn Dooley
This happens often. I have seen people go to their grave loving someone who left them. Then before and after their death, that person who left shows up. It is so sad to watch. Time went by without reuniting. So many people have gone to their graves, still in love with someone they could not live with or trust. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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This happens often. I have seen people go to their grave loving someone who left them. Then before and after their death, that person who left shows up. It is so sad to watch. Time went by without reuniting. So many people have gone to their graves, still in love with someone they could not live with or trust. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Thanks for this thoughtful review, I really appreciate it. :)
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You are welcome.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Feeling guilty is common, but that does not change the fate, consequence is the fruition of action, and it cannot be changed, as you sow so you will reap, suffer the consequence for mistakes done; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Feeling guilty is common, but that does not change the fate, consequence is the fruition of action, and it cannot be changed, as you sow so you will reap, suffer the consequence for mistakes done; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thanks for the words of wisdom and for taking the time to read my poem. :)
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
You have used your imposed words to good effect to create a convincing story, rich in emotion and that seemed unforced. Good luck in the contest Kate xx
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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You have used your imposed words to good effect to create a convincing story, rich in emotion and that seemed unforced. Good luck in the contest Kate xx
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thanks so much for this nice review...I came in 2nd place. :)
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well done
Comment from Bobby Cunningham
This is an excellent poem. Perfect picture, perfect rhyming, perfect flow due to an excellent syllable count and a beautiful poetic story. Very very lovely poem. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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This is an excellent poem. Perfect picture, perfect rhyming, perfect flow due to an excellent syllable count and a beautiful poetic story. Very very lovely poem. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Thank you for reading my poem and for this nice review... :)
Comment from Tootsie
Well done, I really like this poem. It tells a sad story very well and it rhymes nicely It's easy to read and the and the emotions are ever-present.
Of course, he would feel guilty but it really is not his fault. He could not remain with her if his feelings changed, After all, it is his life too.
Sometimes things just happen in this life and even if you admire and respect someone you can't picture them in your life forever,
I'm sure she would have understood given time
Thanks for sharing
Tootsie
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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Well done, I really like this poem. It tells a sad story very well and it rhymes nicely It's easy to read and the and the emotions are ever-present.
Of course, he would feel guilty but it really is not his fault. He could not remain with her if his feelings changed, After all, it is his life too.
Sometimes things just happen in this life and even if you admire and respect someone you can't picture them in your life forever,
I'm sure she would have understood given time
Thanks for sharing
Tootsie
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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Thank you for this great review and the 6 stars. I'm so glad you liked my poem. :)
Comment from Y. M. Roger
We cannot blame ourselves for actions beyond our control, yet that is exactly what the heart does sometimes... A wonderful and heartbreaking interpretation of the 'word challenge' this time! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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We cannot blame ourselves for actions beyond our control, yet that is exactly what the heart does sometimes... A wonderful and heartbreaking interpretation of the 'word challenge' this time! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for this fine review. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from RodG
Oh, this tragic love story is very well told AND uses the prescribed words naturally. We never learn why he left her, but that's no matter. We understand the guilt he feels when he finds her in her grave. What makes this a notch above most entries, is the MORAL stated in your final lines. Rod
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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Oh, this tragic love story is very well told AND uses the prescribed words naturally. We never learn why he left her, but that's no matter. We understand the guilt he feels when he finds her in her grave. What makes this a notch above most entries, is the MORAL stated in your final lines. Rod
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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Thank you for this wonderful review and for the 6 stars. It means a lot to me. :)
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You are very welcome.
Comment from AprilViolet
Wow. This poem really hits home with me. I had a situation where I lost a loved one and felt like it was my fault. He had been fighting before his accident. This poem almost brought me to tears. Exceptional poem! Best of luck in your contest!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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Wow. This poem really hits home with me. I had a situation where I lost a loved one and felt like it was my fault. He had been fighting before his accident. This poem almost brought me to tears. Exceptional poem! Best of luck in your contest!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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Thank you for this great review and the 6 stars... also for sharing.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Cruel fate it was, but it provided a beautiful lost-love poem with the acquired words for the contest. A good entry! "A spirit free from earthly bounds, yet still, her love lives on" Beautiful line!
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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Cruel fate it was, but it provided a beautiful lost-love poem with the acquired words for the contest. A good entry! "A spirit free from earthly bounds, yet still, her love lives on" Beautiful line!
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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Thank you, I really appreciate you reading my poem. I'm so glad you like it.
Comment from Fonda Little
My favorite part was, "There was a stillness in the air,
the scent of dying flowers.
A place that has no need for time,
no seconds, minutes, hours.
He didn't cause the accident,
but still, he feels regret.
She never would have lost control,
had she not been upset.", because of how you described the graveyard!
The Lord led me this verse after I read this,
Psalm 103:12
New International Version
12 as far as the east is from the west,
so far has he removed our transgressions from us.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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My favorite part was, "There was a stillness in the air,
the scent of dying flowers.
A place that has no need for time,
no seconds, minutes, hours.
He didn't cause the accident,
but still, he feels regret.
She never would have lost control,
had she not been upset.", because of how you described the graveyard!
The Lord led me this verse after I read this,
Psalm 103:12
New International Version
12 as far as the east is from the west,
so far has he removed our transgressions from us.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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That's a beautiful verse. I'm glad you liked my poem. Thank you for reading.
