Comment from Aiona

Excellent

I love the anthropomorphism of the cookies in an Alamo-like stand. I'm trying to imagine what they're enduring, and it reads like a Halloween party with cookies being the last to be eaten for some reason. I didn't see any typos. Charming rhyme and meter even though the contest says "free verse." I myself prefer poems with rhyme and meters, as it shows a certain type of process.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020

Thanks so much for your thoughts.....I am obviously not a serious poet...but I love writing these little slapdash verses for the neighbor kids.....God Speed and good luck to you ....Stu Harrell

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

The adventure of the cookies here and you must love cookies a lot to have written a poem where they are the heroes of the day! I can smell them cooking and they are soon demolished! Love Dolly x

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020

Thanks so very much.....I grew up with little cutesy verses and lots of chocolate chips..Obviously these little verses are for kids but lots of fun to fiddle with........Best Wishes.......Stu Harrell

Comment from Melodie Michelle

Excellent

I thought this poem was very cute;-) I loved the way you gave the cookies personalities and lives! The words flowed very well but in some places they would've flowed better.

I loved this poem;-)
Thanks for sharing;-)
Blessings;-)

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2020

Thanks so very much.......obviously, these are for little kids, but they are fun to bang together.....Best and Godspeed........Stu Harrell

reply by Melodie Michelle on 12-Jun-2020

;-)

Comment from roof35

Excellent

Well, this is silly but that made it fun to read. Originality was certainly there. It is well-written and I think my grandkids would love it. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2020

Thanks so much....You are right, it is a verse for children...I grew up with this stuff.....Godspeed and thanks again.....Best Wishes ...Stu Harrell

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Good

Oh, this is just hilarious!! However, I would point out that it may get 'disqualified' because a number of your stanzas have a definite rhyme scheme and, as such, is not a free verse poem... :( But, oh my goodness, what a wonderful children's book in the making!! ;) Thanx for sharing and good luck! ;)

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2020

Thanks so much......you are exactly right...It is a verse for children....I don't always get the exact contest formats correct..so...I am ready to be drummed out in disgrace...Godspeed and Thanks again.....Stu Harrell

reply by the author on 10-Jun-2020

Thanks so much......you are exactly right...It is a verse for children....I don't always get the exact contest formats correct..so...I am ready to be drummed out in disgrace...Godspeed and Thanks again.....Stu Harrell

Comment from Marjon van Bruggen

Excellent

A free verse poem? That amazes me. The Heroic Stand of the Cookies is rhyming from beginning to end. Plus it is funny and reads so easily, that it could have been written for children.
I liked it a lot, but I am afraid it is not what the contest is asking.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020

Thank you so very much........you are right ......I am never exactly certain of the structure requirements of these contests....it's just a verse for children.....Best Wishes and Godspeed.......Stu Harrell

reply by Marjon van Bruggen on 09-Jun-2020

Stuart, you are welcome. The poem is good for what you wrote it for: a children's nice poem. Do yourself a favor before they disqualify the poem for this contest. Take it back and keep it for another contest where they ask for something like this. It is too good to lose it.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

Good imagination, nice story, great personification, good imagery and nice word visuals, free flow of thoughts; this is a fantastic free verse poetry; the heroic stand of the cookies, well said and well done; thanks for sharing this; good luck for the contest. ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2020

Thank you very much........it is just a simple verse for children...Best Wishes and Godspeed.......Stu Harrell