Heaven's Array
5-7-5 (myriad shapes dot)12 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There have been many summers in England with the sun blocked by these white blots and I have cursed them from time to time, so your write resonates with me, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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There have been many summers in England with the sun blocked by these white blots and I have cursed them from time to time, so your write resonates with me, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Dolly,
Always appreciate your reviews. Methinks as children our imaginations about the cloud shapes were more developed and not cursed. LOL
Of course, your bloody English weather may sometimes block your view of a clear sky (-;
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this lovely, descriptive piece. I love watching clouds; they are fascinating. Good metaphor in line 3
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this lovely, descriptive piece. I love watching clouds; they are fascinating. Good metaphor in line 3
Comment Written 04-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thanks Janice for your review and stars. My guess as children, our view of the clouds may have been more imaginative. As adults, methinks this need must likely be prompted. Sitting outside, one scans those moving clouds.
Comment from ameen786
I appreciate your take on the myriad of shapes on the sky; my 6 year old grandson used to see shapes of different U.S states in them and call out the names; good luck!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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I appreciate your take on the myriad of shapes on the sky; my 6 year old grandson used to see shapes of different U.S states in them and call out the names; good luck!
Comment Written 04-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Hi Ameen786!
Very pleased with your response to my typical 5-7-5 poem. Since this is your first time (review), I am hopeful you will scout me out after the contest concludes. Methinks the (grand)children?s imagination looking at the clouds is a higher level than ours (-: You should be proud of your grandson?s history class.
Mystery Poet
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great cloud image and
nice presentation.
-Notes are appreciated.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective imagery of
the cloud formations, and
a very good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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-Great cloud image and
nice presentation.
-Notes are appreciated.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective imagery of
the cloud formations, and
a very good concluding line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thanks Jan for your support of my 5-7-5 entry. Pleased you liked the overall presentation.
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You are quite welcome. ~Pam
Comment from tempeste
This is a brilliant entry.
I have heard of the test cause I have seen it used in a couple of films .. ( I like movies where the main character is loony .. biggrin)
....associating his test with the clouds is a very very creative choice .
I love to observe clouds and ....interpret ...them ...
and it's most likely that based on my replies a head shrinker could get a rough idea of my character.
This is one of the best poems I have read this week ..
PS: I'm splitting hairs again Marco
but I'm curious to why you didn't use the word blots instead of blobs ..which is not only the correct term in the test ..inkblots ....but it s a closer rhyme with dot.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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This is a brilliant entry.
I have heard of the test cause I have seen it used in a couple of films .. ( I like movies where the main character is loony .. biggrin)
....associating his test with the clouds is a very very creative choice .
I love to observe clouds and ....interpret ...them ...
and it's most likely that based on my replies a head shrinker could get a rough idea of my character.
This is one of the best poems I have read this week ..
PS: I'm splitting hairs again Marco
but I'm curious to why you didn't use the word blots instead of blobs ..which is not only the correct term in the test ..inkblots ....but it s a closer rhyme with dot.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Tempeste,
THANKS again for your six-star rating. I changed the poem based on your comments. Methinks as children, our imagination was more full bloomed than what we now ?see? as adults (-;
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Heaven's Array, has the right set up and sites the famous psychological test to emphasize how our inner thoughts guide our perceptions.
I rarely suggest word changes, but DOT, if only chosen as a one-syllable word, might be better replaced by FILL. It sounds better when you say it.
Happy day.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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This 5-7-5, Heaven's Array, has the right set up and sites the famous psychological test to emphasize how our inner thoughts guide our perceptions.
I rarely suggest word changes, but DOT, if only chosen as a one-syllable word, might be better replaced by FILL. It sounds better when you say it.
Happy day.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Bill,
I had considered ?fill?.
I had edited my original based on another review, so dot and ink lot become a rhymed pair.
Keep safe. Stay healthy. And we will all have a happy day!
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I see it now. Cool.
Comment from SixFtLion (Suzanna)
Thank you for writing your poem, short and powerful. And thank you for the education. I love clouds. And I always search for what they remind me of. I like their fluffiness and freedom. Now I can "study" myself when I find different shapes in the clouds next time. :)
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thank you for writing your poem, short and powerful. And thank you for the education. I love clouds. And I always search for what they remind me of. I like their fluffiness and freedom. Now I can "study" myself when I find different shapes in the clouds next time. :)
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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It is quite extraordinary that a first time reviewer of my typical 5-7-5 format would reward me a six-star review. So I THANK YOU for your generous review and stars. After the contest ends, you can see who I am. When you Google about the Rorschach test, you will find that some images may use color and not just black and white images. Methinks that as adults we may not imagine the same as we did as children (-; In the meantime, do enjoy your cloud studies!
Mystery Poet
P.S. Getting a six is always great for my ego, but with this post, you were the first of two reviewers to award me this highest accolade. If I eventually earn a third for this entry, I will really ?sky?!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your unique approach to the contest prompt, Mystery Author. Your image and words match nicely. Your syllable count is correct per line. Your notes are informative. I like the tone of your poem. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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I enjoyed your unique approach to the contest prompt, Mystery Author. Your image and words match nicely. Your syllable count is correct per line. Your notes are informative. I like the tone of your poem. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Jan
I do appreciate your kind words in your review of my 5-7-5 contest entry. Pleased you enjoyed my eclectic approach and the entry so overall presentation.
Comment from lancellot
Yes, can see how the clouds can be used and probably was one of the first Rorschach test used. I think people will like this as it will remind them of when they were young and gazed at the clouds wondering what they looked like.
Great idea.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Yes, can see how the clouds can be used and probably was one of the first Rorschach test used. I think people will like this as it will remind them of when they were young and gazed at the clouds wondering what they looked like.
Great idea.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Yes as children are imagination may have been more full bloomed. As adults, we may need to be prompted to discover the clouds? hidden shapes.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
You find and think heaven's array in the sky and perceive it is like the personality dots of white; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this, wish good luck in the contest. ALCREATOR
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You find and think heaven's array in the sky and perceive it is like the personality dots of white; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this, wish good luck in the contest. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thanks ALCREATOR for your kind review and good wishes. In getting the Rorschach background for my notes, I discovered that the images were not all black and white. In a college psychology class, I participated in a ?test? that only included black and white ink splatches.
