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Where Our Faith Lies

Under Ten Words contest entry

2 total reviews 
Comment from phill doran
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Hello Anon
Very good. A very sobering thought. It is difficult, I am sure, to work in this small format and you've done well to get your thought out in the cramped space. Sadly, I do not know if "Will we..." or "We will.." it the most appropriate start to the line.
I also think you have chosen well to go with the contraction (one's) rather than "...one is..." even though you have the extra word. It makes the phrase more punchy and compact.
Overall, I think you will do well with this: let's see.
I wish you well
cheers
phill

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
    Thank you for the great review, Phill. I really appreciate the generous stars. Yeah, the contest requires that it be less than 10 syllables so I had to go with what I could work with. Lol. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great rest of your weekend.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Food for thought here as there are always two sides to an argument and someone's no one side has the right answer, a clever write, much enjoyed . . . love Dolly x

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
    Thank you, Dolly. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a wonderful weekend.