Quietude
Two line-essence poem9 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Congrats on your prize. Delightfully clever turn of phrase--life takes a while (s/b two words in this context) to rhyme--that earns your stars in itself. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Congrats on your prize. Delightfully clever turn of phrase--life takes a while (s/b two words in this context) to rhyme--that earns your stars in itself. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Hello Elizabeth and thank you for your time and the wonderful review.
Comment from Melissa Russell Deur
Congratulations on your 2nd place finish in the contest! When I read your poem the first time, I disagreed with your first line, but loved your second line! I thought "smile all the time" seemed disingenuous. So I read it again and again. Now I think your first line reflects hope and faith: Keep smiling because life will get better. I will remember "Life takes awhile to rhyme" for a long time. It may become a mantra for perseverance. I feel so much peace when I read it.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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Congratulations on your 2nd place finish in the contest! When I read your poem the first time, I disagreed with your first line, but loved your second line! I thought "smile all the time" seemed disingenuous. So I read it again and again. Now I think your first line reflects hope and faith: Keep smiling because life will get better. I will remember "Life takes awhile to rhyme" for a long time. It may become a mantra for perseverance. I feel so much peace when I read it.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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Hello Melissa and thank you for stopping by; I appreciate your time and the wonderful review, quite insightful; thank you. Welcome to the site and all the best to you, enjoy and please stay safe.
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Glad I read your poem!
Comment from Gloria ....
Well Kamran I think you've done a splendid job with this two line poem. Internal and external rhymes all in place and the whole 12 syllables of it leaves your reader with a calm sense of balance.
Excellent entry into this contest and I wish you great luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Well Kamran I think you've done a splendid job with this two line poem. Internal and external rhymes all in place and the whole 12 syllables of it leaves your reader with a calm sense of balance.
Excellent entry into this contest and I wish you great luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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My friend, I always appreciate your insights and encouraging review and I thank you.
Comment from Joan E.
Smiles and hugs are always good medicine! I liked your rhyme in your two-line essence poem and reminding us to be patient as well. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Smiles and hugs are always good medicine! I liked your rhyme in your two-line essence poem and reminding us to be patient as well. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Joan my friend, I am pleased you like this write; thank you.
Comment from Bill Schott
This two-line poem, Quietude, uses eleven words a rhyming couplet to remind the readers that patience and hope will pay us back in the long run.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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This two-line poem, Quietude, uses eleven words a rhyming couplet to remind the readers that patience and hope will pay us back in the long run.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Bill my friend, appreciate your time and the thoughtful comments; thank you.
Comment from zanya
Yes, there's certainly a grain of truth in there somewhere in this short format of the two- line poem - line two is well constructed and fits effectively with line one-thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Yes, there's certainly a grain of truth in there somewhere in this short format of the two- line poem - line two is well constructed and fits effectively with line one-thanks for sharing
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Hello again zanya, I thank you for your wonderful and encouraging review.
Comment from Aiona
LOL! It took me a while to understand this poem, and then I realized it was a metaphor for trying to make things fit -- in life as well as in writing poetry of my favorite type -- the rhyming kind.
It has six syllables per line, and an internal rhyme ("smile" and "awhile"). Well done! (Lovely picture too, cleo85.)
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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LOL! It took me a while to understand this poem, and then I realized it was a metaphor for trying to make things fit -- in life as well as in writing poetry of my favorite type -- the rhyming kind.
It has six syllables per line, and an internal rhyme ("smile" and "awhile"). Well done! (Lovely picture too, cleo85.)
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Hi Aiona, hello again and thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
This is a cute little poem. I like it. I am not sure the title fits, but the poem itself is really great. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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This is a cute little poem. I like it. I am not sure the title fits, but the poem itself is really great. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Hello Amanda, glad you like the write; thank you.
Comment from RodG
Some good advice shared here in a witty fashion. Yes, learning how Life can "rhyme" takes time and experience, so one might as well smile. Rod
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Some good advice shared here in a witty fashion. Yes, learning how Life can "rhyme" takes time and experience, so one might as well smile. Rod
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Hello Rod, glad you like the write; I thank you.