The Lady Wore A Hat
I wanted to copy her grace...35 total reviews
Comment from Moon baby
Now, first of all, I liked the subject of your story! I too am at the age where beauty fades and changes seem to take place too fast! That those before me who I wished to be more like are now a lost memory. I am the wrong person to suggest your writing needs any help! To me, your style is graceful and your ability to write a short story that tells a whole story is a talent in itself!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Now, first of all, I liked the subject of your story! I too am at the age where beauty fades and changes seem to take place too fast! That those before me who I wished to be more like are now a lost memory. I am the wrong person to suggest your writing needs any help! To me, your style is graceful and your ability to write a short story that tells a whole story is a talent in itself!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thank you for reading my work.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a wonderful, easy to understand, with something to say, True Story Flash contest entry. People do grow old. It should do well. Good luck!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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This is a wonderful, easy to understand, with something to say, True Story Flash contest entry. People do grow old. It should do well. Good luck!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thank you for reading and commenting in my work here.
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You're welcome.
Comment from CandySoda777
Your descriptions were good, but I'm confused. There is no story to it. Why did she change so much? What happened? This has the chance of becoming a great story, if you write the right thing. Is there some kind of hidden meaning I'm missing?
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reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Your descriptions were good, but I'm confused. There is no story to it. Why did she change so much? What happened? This has the chance of becoming a great story, if you write the right thing. Is there some kind of hidden meaning I'm missing?
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Comment Written 01-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thank you for reading my work and for your comments.
Comment from Spitfire
This is beautiful. Feels more like a poem than a story. Effective use of metaphor--compass, symphony. The poignant endin that might described many old women. Try to talk to them and it does seem as if they have lost soul.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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This is beautiful. Feels more like a poem than a story. Effective use of metaphor--compass, symphony. The poignant endin that might described many old women. Try to talk to them and it does seem as if they have lost soul.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thank you, Spitfire, for reading so well into my story.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your contest entry. Your words are well-chosen and create great imagery. There is good flow as time passes, too. I'm not sure about 'floated at her (compass--what does it mean here?).
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
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reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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I enjoyed your contest entry. Your words are well-chosen and create great imagery. There is good flow as time passes, too. I'm not sure about 'floated at her (compass--what does it mean here?).
Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
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Comment Written 01-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thank you for reading my work. Floating at her compass, I tried to write about that there was "an air" of grace and mystery at her passing, walking. Like a Greta Garbo lady...Does this make sense?
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I understand the idea of grace etc. I am still confused over the use of compass. ( I see it as--like floating on air).
